Two Space Time Dragons (Dragon Evolution Story)
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Description
A dragon evolution story about two dragons who are born in one of the most dangerous places in the world, Gods Graveyard. What used to be a thriving society of demi-gods and gods is now a hunting ground for extremely dangerous monsters after a civil war broke out and destroyed the city. These two dragons may be different in nearly every way but they must band together to survive this world and get revenge for their parents and as per their parents' words live happily.
This is my first time ever writing a book so criticism is welcomed.
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Author
- Cyberou
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- Rating
- 4.2/ 5.0
- Followers
- 6
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Community Reviews(2)
- Unity DragosRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0This review is early on right now, but I am enjoying the story so far. But at the same time, it is definitely a work in progress. The plot itself is good an interesting, but the execution of the characters needs some work. All of them do each have their own unique personalities but at the same time they are somewhat flat and obvious in their design. Another major flaw is the grammar. There aren't any spelling mistakes that I have seen (or just don't remember right now) so far, but there have been problems with word choice and sentences that are longer than they should be. Simple things like missing commas or periods, making the sentence go on longer than it should.
In summary, the story and plot are good and I do want to read on, but the characters and grammar need some work. The characters need to have more depth to them instead of just being some cut out characters we've seen a hundred times. As well as reworking some sentences to increase their readability.
I appreciate the writer for having something this good as their first story, and I hope for them to gain a lot of experience from this. Keep on doing what you are doing by letting us read a more enjoyable and entertaining story. - DawnTidesRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5I haven't read much yet, but there are two things immediately stand out to me. First of all, there's a lot of missing punctuation, mainly commas which make the sentences blocky and long. Additionally, I see the use of 'as' a lot where there could be commas or semicolons. It's fine if used sparingly but I see it in nearly every paragraph, which makes it read like an informative essay; plain and bland.
I haven't read much so I'm not able to comment on the plot until I read further and edit the review, but so far it seems interesting, if maybe a bit forced.
Another thing I noticed is that the chapter releases seem very frequent and consistent which is a very good thing for a story that just started. However, I'd recommend going a bit slower in order to both release higher quality chapters and not burn out.