Twisted and Intertwined

Self-Published

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Description

Two paths.Lsyn was born in the Freir Demon tribe with a physical body that less than a normal demon would. He keep trying to blend in although he had to improvise in lots of things. In the end he manage to fit in even with his small built however the gods are twisted and good things never last. Due to his abnormalities, he was banished from his tribe and left to dead inside the unforgiving forestMyra, the daughter of Lord Tyr, a noble in living in the city of Valdrath with simple life until she tapped into her magic potential at a tender age of 5. She enrolled in a prestigious school along side prince and princess of nations. Loved by the gods, family and friends, she excels in her life in becoming someone that contributes in the magic world.What happen when both of them meet eye-to-eye? Can they imagine how different their world are with one another?

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
Bluestruck

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTURE

Royal Road Stats

Rating
2.5/ 5.0
Followers
14
Views
12,714

Chapters(12 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

  • ScandalfRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    My first and probably the most important complain? is ;
    WHAT THE FUCK IS THAT PRINCE OF SOME DUMBASS KINGDOM DOING IN THIS STORY AND TAKING ALMOST ALL OF THE FIRST FEW CHAPTERS JUST FOR HIMSELF? IF HE IS SO IMPORTANT WHY IS HE NOT IN THE FUCKING SYNOPSIS?
    Tell me what are you trying to do with that prince character man? Is he just there just to create a love triangle with our demon MC and that princess? if so, either go re-write the story or delete it completely and start writing another one, one without a misleading or nonsense synopsis this time.
    The MC you talked about in your synopsis, yes I don't even know his name, because up to the 8th chapter ( don't know the rest, couldn't bear with it and dropped the story) he got absolutely no attention at all.
    Aww man.. I was so excited, after reading up to 3rd chapter or so, then it got shit.as for why;
    You tried TOO hard with your characters which is supposed to be a good thing. Only that,your method was wrong. You can't just keep adding more and more characters like that dude, after the 7th chapter or so, my head started hurting because of the sheer amount of characters. (I'm pretty sure you could cut that number to half and your work still wouldn't have any drop in quality, in fact its quality would go up). Now, you might be thinking you keep saying all these but you still rated 4.5 for character, well its because you tried. Yes you TRIED and you even let your works story and style suffer just for your character fetish? but you even failed at that part too. Again, because of the same reason, too many goddamn characters. We don't need to fucking know what that princes guards are called, we don't need to know what some unnecessary servant is called etc. etc.
  • asherinoRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    There's a 5 star review saying the author has 'almost perfect grammer', but the review itself has bad grammar. There's even a spell check in the submission textbox, for crying out loud!
    I read the first chapter. Author's grammar is mediocre, quite a few mistakes. The story doesn't transition as smoothly as I'd like, but considering the fact that there's 12 chapters already, the author is dedicated to the concept.
    I'll probably try reading this again when it hits ~50 chapters. For now, 3 stars.