Tsar Bomba

Self-Published

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Description

The story of a man who was suddenly transported to another universe with a game like 'System', Level ups, Evolutions, Stats, the works. He wakes up as a tadpole in a swamp and through a combination of luck and absurd luck gets set on the road to becoming one of his new worlds most powerful people.

This is a first draft with minimal editing. The Tables and such are more prevalent in the early chapters but I am trying to keep the tables to a minimum. I do not intend for there to be any sexually explicit content in this fiction, just occasional innuendos and the like.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: ChainedChompira

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 325
Views: 30,669

Chapters(11 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

Tales_Of_TransformationRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is fun to read there are cringe jokes, the system can get confusing, some pieces of plot, and a concrete goal in the first ten chapters, which doesn't always happen. This story is more about exploring ideas then fixating on one specific thing. The mc does need more depth/information about themself. But overall this is a fun story there are many things that can be said to bring the author, but there is a reason why this story is on the rising stars. This is a story we're the read can, lack for some better words, turn their brain off and have fun reading.
QueenInRagsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall this is an interesting take on an overpowered MC.
It's fun to read, somewhat unique, and kind of refreshing.
It's not often I come upon a lit RPG power fantasy with good clear and grammatically correct writing. The prose and vocabulary are all good.
The intro is sufficiently fleshed out, and most things feel pretty natural. Time skips help make timelines a little more believable but there are a few plot points that feel a bit off.
The characters and dialogue are a bit weak, but there are some moments that show careful thought from the author.
My favorite is the MC reaching out to shake someone's hand and them not really knowing what to do. After all this is another world.
There have been a few plot points that have been hit only once however and that's a tad frustrating. Overall this story feels like an all-out sprint with the author desperate to reach a certain point.
Perhaps things might change once this point is reached, but I feel like the beginnings of this story need just a tad of refining. Perhaps a bit of expansion here and there.
Below are more specific gripes.
I guess the worst offender in terms of plot points is the fact that the Mc only makes like three totems for his "mentors" within the story. Keep in mind that these totems are absolutely overpowered and mentioned at least 20 times. Gaining an amazing power with the ability to provide permanent services the MC at most lightly explores this within a safe environment. Making a total of one type out of the many available.
Even then after being so indebted to Iggy and Radgar our MC only makes one or two for them. Yes, I guess those two manage to hit an important plot point, but I feel like this could have been more explored. With our mc possibly making a variety of totems for his friends, bringing great positive change to the swamp or doing something pretty unique. Instead, this huge overpowered plot point gets swiftly swept under the rug.
This is even more frustrating as the MC is told not to make
KyeRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
So this could be far worse than it is, but that doesn't mean it's in any way good, The easiest way for me to describe this is "cringy"
So we start off with the main character, Jacob Holloway: apparently, the creator of flappy bird in this universe, dying.
He gets met by the standard system representative and is told he's being reincarnated, very standard stuff. Because he put a joke in the terms of service agreement that they would give up their soul to him when they die he happens to have a ridiculous amount of souls at his disposal, somewhere in the range of 400 million. (side note, he feels nothing bad about literally trading peoples souls away for his own benefit and doesn't think to ask what they will do with them)
The system needs to trade him for these souls before he reincarnates and so he gets the benefit of having a free-range choice of what he wants to start with. Here is right when it gets very odd, however.
A question about the system is a single soul and in his infinite wisdom decides to ask a grand total of like 20 questions, when he has many hundreds of millions to get vital information pertaining to his survival.
So as the next logical thing after spending a grand total of like 20 souls, he asks for skills related to being immortal and the skill he can get with it is perpetual rebirth, literally giving him infinite life and the ability to keep everything but his race levels, which is a benefit not a downside because he now has the ability to die, evolve by killing a couple of creatures, and then gain the stat points/skills from that evolution and then just die and repeat.
He keeps skills, skill levels, classes, class levels and memories every time he dies. So all he needs is a skill powerful enough to kill the weakest creatures in existence, (not a very hard feat) and he has just broken the entire omniscient system.
Oh, and did I mention the skill costs only a million souls? Completely broken, after gaining the power to be a literal immortal deity h