A vast tale of many characters in a world that reflects the one around us even now. Ancient beings stir and a relentless and alien force makes its way to Earth. Earth is unaware of the coming Darkness. It cannot be stopped, but it can be fought and humans are horrible about not fighting.

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HWPerfidyRoyal Road

★★★★★ 4.5

Story: This is a collection of short stories taking place in the same universe of gods and Witnesses. The premise is very creative, with a lot of mythological elements that contribute towards a whimsical set of stories. There are Norse gods, mermaids, fae, martians, and others.
Style: The style is detailed, painting a vivid picture of what’s going on in the reader’s mind. However, there are some parts that aren’t explained very in depth for the amount of detail that’s put into the environments, leaving the reader somewhat confused as to what’s going on.
Dialogue is a bit odd. It comes in an unnatural big block, as if the characters are monologuing to themselves instead of talking to each other. Maybe it’s an intentional style choice, but it does feel a bit odd to me.
Character: It’s a bit difficult to tell the characters apart from each other, particularly since most of them sound very similar, and they all speak in huge blocks of monologues. There is little room for banter from which we could see their personalities more clearly. Due to how the POV switches every chapter, we are rarely given time to get to know a character before we move on to the next. The only ones I’d say I got to know better than others are Jack, Tobias and Callan.
Grammar: Some errors.

KnightravenessRoyal Road

★★★★ 4.0

To be clear, I wanted to put a score better than half, as I feel there is an author here with a vivid imagination. I can see influences from all forms of culture and folklore, with nuances of the Lovecraftian realms. In premise, it is something I think many would find interesting. And in full disclaimer, I read about 10 chapters, and there is still much that can be done to stitch this together into something more cohesive.
Story: In general, I understand the overall premise better than I do actively reading it. It seems our MC, or at least, the one that starts this journey, is about to discover where all lore, histories, and futures, intersect and intertwine. How they affect one another, and how darkness is aways present. It is a grand idea that is more refined than its execution. I *think* what's happening in later chapters is that we're seeing the collection of other "Witnesses" but it is unclear. The author is clearly excited about showing us a place where Norse gods, Arthurian Legends, Martians, and Fairies, all reside in a plausible way in the same universe. For now, each chapter reads as individual short stories. Maybe that was the intention? It's hard to tell, and the blurb does not help, here.
Style: Inconsistency is common. And I don't just mean that each chapter, for now, seems to switch PoV (which is fine, when you know what you're getting into), but even within each chapter or scene, the PoVs change. The length of each chapter is also inconsistent (contributing to what makes it feel like a series of short stories). Time is spent in areas unneeded, and yet improtant things are raced through, as though the author really want to tell us more about where we're going, but has not the patience to let us learn from context. I read a few segments, even a whole chapter, more than once, to try to spend more time with how these developments "happen". (For example, we could have been *told*, instead of shown, that Jack beat his wife and that's why she left with thei

To Witness the Coming Darkness

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