The Young Wise Man

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In a world of might and magic, a boy named Nero was given a different life. He had lived his adolescence under the tutelage of one of the greatest heroes in the world, his father. In an Ivory tower filled with books of which he calls home. Living a life of relative peace and seclusion. Learning alchemy, studying magic and gaining knowledge beyond his years. With only his father as his companion through the growing years of his life. He would wonder how much different is he compared to the outside world? Until an eventful encounter thrusts him on a journey away from the confines of his home. He will gain life experience much different from the pages of a book. With a mysterious book in his possession called the "Book of Knowledge" or...the "Book of the Dead." He will lead a life of adventure and to the pursuit of knowledge. Gaining numerous friends and many enemies after him. Nero will try to solve the mysteries surrounding him and live as he sees fit. Will he be acknowledged as the wisest of them all?

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5,000+ Words a chapter.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: nEoQuIcKsiLvEr

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 216
Views: 66,180

Chapters(18 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

JormungandRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Seriously this story should be in the top lists... your story is great also interesting. Is not like many others about reincarnation or game and make your story looks more original!!! Please for the love of four god hehehe continue on your story!!!! I can't wait for more!!!!
PeppermancerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: You are able to develop characters and the world around them in such a fluent way, while still advancing the plot and keeping me interested.
Story: You are litterally following the perfect story ark. The beginning that is challenged by a drastic event causing the characters to venture out into the world, led by a harold of some sort, like. It's incredible. The best story tellers, writers, movie makers, even video game designers follow this ark, with the belly of the whale and the enchantress and so on. Well done sir, well done.
Grammar: I can read it fluently with no hiccups in the flow. That's really all that matters, but for those who care, there are little to no grammar mistakes.
Character: This is my favorite part of your story, you have managed to make realistic characters that develop and change based on their past and current circumstances, and it doesn't feel forced! Everyone has their own ambitions and worries, their own character flaws, but you still relate to them and care for them. They can be funny and dense, or serious and quick witted. It's wonderful.
Conclusion: You have a knack for this, and should seriously consider getting your books published, or at the very least advertising some donations. If you keep pumping out books this good, it would be money well spent. And just know that I do not give out high ratings and long reviews often, but the ones I do are the ones that end up going big. I wish you luck.
bharg7Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Its a pretty entertaining story with a little cliched but lovable characters. Initially the author has problems with his tenses but I think it has improved with the chapters. The world building is pretty detailed and not boring (although the first two chapters are somewhat of a drag)
However there are a couple of reasons why this story will not be one of the best on rrl unless the author changes some things; plot holes and plot devices.
For example, how he tries to prolong the mystery of the MC's identity when the very first questions you'd ask a person you met in that situation would be "what the heck he was doing there and 'why' he was there and who he was". You can use plot devices to be entertaining but don't force them or drag them until they get annoying. (You'd think the parent of the girl would try to figure out he was, if they were going to let him travel with her)
A major flaw is the character inconsistencies. The king and the orc lord seem juvenile. The 'uncle king' - you say he cares about the girl so much. I understand him setting up the marriage (its a different culture/time) but he should've atleast checked out on the character of the person he tried to marry off the girl too. This is not the action of someone who cares.
The orc girl is ugly. Ugly to orcs? that makes sense. Buut then a few humans call her that too. But she is supposed to be pretty - so how does she look? Why would she look pretty to some humans but so ugly to some that people would openly say it to her. This is illogical. Beauty is a matter of perspective - yes but perspectives wont change so drastically that it beauty would become ugly. Unless you are a completely different species altogether. Even then beautiful creatures are beaautiful if you can get over the fear/bias etc. Also the Orcs and humans are not entirely isolated - if that is the case most people would know that Orcs and humans have different aesthetics. People arent that stupid, unless its an anime.
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