The Wraith King

Self-Published

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Description

Prince Calex Zath Archivon had just turned sixteen and he doesn’t care about the Imperial throne or the politics his brothers played. His only desire is to have his own command of troops. But when he asked for fifty men, but was given thirty young recruits.He knows his time is short and he needs his men to be at their best form as soon as possible. To do that, he knows he needs them to experience fighting while putting their very being on the line.Fortunately, there's plenty of dangers to be found. From mythical beasts to ancient monsters, giant trolls to goblins, demons to humans and amongst other things that bump in the night.But before Prince Calex can rush on to war, he first needs to fight a battle to earn the trust and respect of his men. For only a madman will truly follow a boy, playing commander.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
renshaw

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMARTIAL ARTS

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.8/ 5.0
Followers
69
Views
17,557

Chapters(8 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

  • AomineZakyRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This story has an amazing concept and backstory. it keeps you just begging and waiting for more.  so far, there are only 3 chapters, but if the story remains as amazing as it is now, there is no doubt in my mind that this story will be a landmark story to represent web fictions on royalroad.
    regarding the grammar and general vocab, its levels above the royalroad standard. since its only just started, i'm guessing the author hasn't gotten a proofreader yet but i say, if this is your level of writing, you have no need for one.
    Keep up the good work and know that you have always have a reader waiting for updates. Hope to see this on the TopWeeklyFictions List or better yet the TopMonthlyFictions and BestRated Fictions. but for that to happen, you're gonna need a constant supply of updates which i shall await oh so very joyously :3
  • HaeruRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    Since this is my first review it's a little short and crude.
    I can find no faults in the grammar and the story, despite only reaching 2 chapters at the moment, has managed to captivate me. I am enjoying the current 'commander' concept and hope to see it built upon rather than abandoned.These 2 chapters give me hope and I can't wait for future updates.
    Keep up the good work.
  • KillashardRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I love finding stories like this one just starting out.  It is like finding an untouched gold vein when walking around outside.  You don't go in expecting anything spectacular, but are blown away by the story and feel richer for the time spent reading.
    Story, style, grammar, and character are all well thought out and fleshed in a believable manner.  There are few mistakes in the long chapters.  Those few mistakes, when pointed out, are quickly fixed by the author.  I hope this story is picked up by more people.  It deserves more views and followers.
  • Real29Royal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    The idea of the commanding Prince is great. The Royal social dynamic and hints at sub plots give this story wide room to grow and expand. Character development is off to solid start. The style of writing is very fluid and has good pace. Its only two chapters, but I was impressed enough to create an account and say I look forward to learning about these characters and the world you have envisioned. Great work!!! :)
  • TolackRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    Such a good start, that if you didn't have any grammar errors (like a missing word or two per chapter) then I'd rate it as 4 1/2 stars (too early to rate 5 stars imo).
    You've given us a decent character for the MC, and amplified his image by showing us how the MC looks from the perspectives of those around him. I like that in Savage Divinity, and so far I like it here too.
    The story has barely begun but you fit multiple pieces of concise information that lets me (as the reader) come up with my own opinions and speculations at what can happen in your story. Which also means that I'm looking forward to the future of your story!
    One thing I have to critique is that while your fight scene was decent, it didn't give off the feeling of a young genius fighting a master swordsman (and according to one POV, the Lt is a master swordsman while the villagers say he's a martial arts genius.) I'd up the rating for this to 5 stars without a doubt (for enjoyment at least) if your fight scenes were more exciting, and maybe 'flashy'.
    This may only have three chapters out so far, but I'm looking forward to the future of this.