The World is My Playground

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Description

Constant war and hate has caused the gods to give up on their first creations. They have decided to create a new world, but what to do with their first. Why not summon a random soul and have them do whatever they want.

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Hey guys author here, just wanted to say that if you like what you read, comment what it was, and if there was something you did't like, comment that as well so that i can improve from that. Thanks in advance, and hope you guys enjoy the story!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Roxsoul

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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MyriddinRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Which isn't a bad thing!!! Everyone needs to start somewhere, and you have a good story going on here.
I'll try to do my critisism in the Advanced Review categories.
Style 3/5 :
The style with which you write right now, while not terribly definitely has a lot of work you can do to it. I don't know if it is because you are rushing the chapters, or not paying attention to it, but as of chapter 4 some of the dialogue can feel forced. And example here is "David - That is a problem. About how many are in this alliance. " First of all, I will re-analyse this extract in the grammar section as well. Now, your problem I think is that you are writing what you need to get the information behind his speech across, rather than what he would actually say. In order for you to improve in this i think, you need to imagine yourself saying those lines, or trying to say the idea behind them. You might want to go over this or imagine other people saying it so that you can find a way for it to sound natural. Of course this would take ages if you did it for every piece of speech that came about so obviously you should only do this until you feel suitably comfortable ,after which you will find it natural i think. Tbh idk, im just reviewing a story on RRL XD lol. aaaaaanyway.
Story 4.5/5:
I am a sucker for these kinds of stories, nothing has happened yet, but i love the monster tamer stories, i like how the MC is promised to become OP but starts off weak. I like the sassy AI :P Yeah its a good start, so I'll leave it a high mark as i can;t expect too much to have happened by this tage in the sotry anyway.
Grammer 2.5/5 :
While there aren't too many spelling mistakes what really gets me going is examples like this "David - That is a problem. About how many are in this alliance. ". ALL THE DIALOGUE IS DONE IWTH HYPTHENS..... WTF?!?!!?!?. Seriously, "" exist for a reason, USE THEM!!!.. I said "Use them you fool!". Ok, secondly use more proper punctuation, like ?,!,,,;,', etc.... If its a ques