The Warrior Mechanic

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Description

“Just go and be a banker or lawyer or something, you’re a Breckenridge. You have no chance at becoming an exosuit warrior.”They’d say.

How could he use his family name to limit himself to such a life of regularity and mundanity?

No! He could never place such shackles on himself.

After being cursed with poor genetic talent, Cael Breckenridge is rendered almost totally incompatible with exosuits, the cutting-edge technology of military warfare ubiquitously seen across the galaxy.

However, after receiving the mysterious Warrior Mechanic System, a new, especial door opens for him.

Mastering both exosuit combat and high-tech robotics design, his system allows him to blend formidable strength with unparalleled innovation.

Follow Cael’s journey to becoming a skilled, seasoned mechanic as well as a fierce, valiant warrior!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: animeball z

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Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

Camadt (Alex Hancock)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall 5/5
Overall the story almost feels like an immersive video game. With the quests to compete and the way the author details the world, I found myself thinking about how I would try to proceed in those situations. That’s the mark of a good story in my book.
Character 5/5
The main character, Cael Breckenridge, is a loner, though it isn’t only by choice. He’s in the C-Grade class, which is where the institute puts the students with poor talent and it also seems like ones who have a poor chance of manifesting talent. At this point in the story, Cael is still struggling to improve, but that’s kind of the point of LitRPGs, to keep improving. Despite setbacks and shortcomings, Cael remains optimistic and strives to prove himself.
Grammar 5/5
No complaints here.
Story 5/5
It started when an alien device did what it did… This might not be that story, but that was my first thought when Cael finds the device. It’s not a watch and instead of superpowers he gets quests, oh and there are penalties for not completing the main quest in time. Nothing major, just death. This leads to a race to fulfill the requirements of the main quest while still dealing with his low combat ability and money woes.
Style 5/5
The author's writing style is engaging and descriptive, creating vivid imagery and a sense of immersion into this futuristic world.
NolzenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: While the author doesn't use a fanciful style, I believe that's a good thing in this case. In the story's format, his style of writing makes sure not to impede the content of his story, which allows other parts of it to shine. It is a great blend of expository, description. And from what I've seen in the first chapter as well, he was able to articulate action scenes extremely well too.
Grammar: Nothing much was wrong. Perhaps a few hiccups here and there but otherwise spot on!
Story: The story is well-written and also very well-paced. Each chapter does not seem to shove too much new content into your mouth while also building up on the previous chapters' content. The quests have a sort of novelty, with a bit of subtle humour blended in with Carl's inner thoughts. The introduction in the first chapter to perhaps Carl's incompetence also made us more curious about how strong he could get with the new system.
Character: While there is not much character development currently, his personality is consistent, and his intentions are well articulated so the readers know what his next moves will be.
Side Note: The Cover Art is fire.
GanuRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's a story which makes you feel great. If the title gave you Steam/Cyberpunkish vibes, then my dear friend you are partially wrong, this is an amazing LitRPG styled tale with the protagonist being the "Mechanic".
Currently, the story follows the typical 'grind grind grind' theme prevalent in this genre, which aligns seamlessly with the portrayal of our protagonist so far.
The protagonist embodies the archetype of being alone but not lonely, reminiscent of Andrew Garfield's portrayal of Peter Parker. If you appreciated that iteration of Spider-Man, you're likely to find the character of this Mechanic equally engaging.
The setting is a recognizable LitRPG-style urban, futuristic world, with the author infusing it with thier own unique elements. It feels familiar yet remains engaging and far from dull.
The writing style is clear and easy to understand, although there are a few areas where the grammar could be refined. Nevertheless, it does not detract from the overall reading experience.
The characters are alright, nothing much to say about them. You'll enjoy the interactions and the battles.
Coming to the battles, they are amazing. The fight sequences have been written with great details, you can easily imagine what went down that evening.
All in all, I'd say, if you like the LitRPG genre this one is the next read for you.
Devon BarringtonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story offers an exhilarating start to a compelling LitRPG journey. The author skillfully combines elements of futuristic technology with the classic coming-of-age narrative, immersing me in a vibrant world where Cael Breckenridge discovers unexpected potential. The grammar is flawless, making for a smooth and engaging read. Character descriptions are vivid and well-done, allowing readers to quickly connect with Cael and his struggles. The urban, technologically advanced setting is perfectly suited, promising action and deeper mysteries. I am anticipating more from this series!
CatgurlRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I like the concept, but the execution needs work.
Somewhat dull, simplistic prose - approach this again and try to use your own authentic voice to make this YOUR story and rise a bit (or a lot) above generic.
Supposedly intelligent characters behave stupidly - this is a flaw common to new writers (and sometimes experienced ones). Keep your characters's actions and thinking smart and consistent. Give it a little think and use methods other than stupidity to advance the plot - you will be surprised how inventive your imagination can be if you just let it loose.
MC is too passive and unthinking now. He is weak with low mana, wants to be a warrior but does nothing extra to improve himself physically or to improve his mana. When he gets a system, he uses the first option he sees without exploring any other options at any point (at least as far as I read). Make him active and smarter
The virtual system and virtual combat are poorly explained and painfully dull to read. Sit down and think out your system, map it out in writing and make it clear in your mind - then convey it to readers. This will help with the combat too. Keep the story moving, do not drag out any one portion - again, this will help with combat and keeping reader interest.
Characters are undeveloped as far as I read. Develop back stories and lean into them. Let them live. Again, keep your characters consistent.
Have to say no to this one for now, but also have to say I would love to see another attempt.
Author, you have lots of potential. Writing is a skill and like all skills it needs practice to improve. Keep practicing animeball z. You have good ideas and lots of creativity and your skills improve with each story you write.
Heartless JusticeRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This series is a good read. Gives me The Mech Touch vibes, but I found as I read more and more things got repetitive. The MC works or trains, a quest is given where the consequences are all to over the top. No sense of real failure to learn from their mistakes. So 2/3s of the way through what's published I just got bored.
Corvo269Royal Road
★★ 2.0
The plot is simple and servicable, it's only the start and could be something more down the line.
The grammar is fine, simple, no glaring flaws.
The problem is in the crafting and the character.
First of all, the main character, is said to have high intelligence, which is a joke to be honest as he does not make a single smart decision at all.
Bit spoilery, but let's paraphrase his skill selection and the successive "crafting" he did. Gears are basically souls/skillpoint/exp whatever.
So, when the skill list opens, and he has 20 gears to buy one skill. There are 5 trees of programming, manufacturing, engineering, combat and a locked away metallurgy tree.
Now you would think he browsed through the 4 options and went through the pros and cons right.. nahhhh
He picked the first skill he liked the sound of in the programming tree and never even looked at the others. Yup... so now, he picked a skill that helps with coding software for mechs right... and he gets a quest to make his first alteration design on a support drone.
So as someone who just picked a software skill, logically it would make sense to find a support drone and optimize its coding for better efficiency, allow overclocking, quicker responses right, nope, he decides to do it by sticking better thrusters on a recon drone to make it speedier... this man didn't even open the engineering skill tree to ever check the skills there.
Now, after finishing that alteration quest, and a few successive quests over the course of about 3 months in world he has 100 gears, enough to buy a single stat point, or 5 SKILLS, and he decides to waste it on increasing his stat point. Mind you, in these months he still hasn't opened up to check the rest of his skill tree even once.
So after that, he gets a hidden quest for upgrading his stat, and completion of it gave him 4 more stat points, and in the middle of it, he got the ability to obtain gears from fights won and selling stuff as a merchant. And like 9 gears per fight/sale. A
TotallyAmsAHoomanRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
This is the kind of world where you have to bug 10 kg of virtual steal to make virtual swords to sell as indiviual products and then buy more steel to make more of the same sword if that didn’t sound like a convoluted way to keep our mc from being too much like the mech touch this story is for you. But don’t worry you are constantly reminded why its like this “the big companies instead of making real products make it so you have to buy virtual materials and licenses to prevent the market from being flooded by bad inventions.” the world is good in some ways but just hand waved at others. it has potential but i wont be here for it.
small goblin 2Royal Road
★★ 1.5
The problem with this one is the famly as In it his family is set to be evil and all this other jazz but they aren't the worse thing they do is act snooty around him and after being told they cut ties with him they suddenly invite him to attend a family get together. The other problem the snooty thing every other charter except like three have been arrogant so it stops being evil and instead the from finally no one but like some poeple Chronicly online have yet ask how he can do the things he can do
SayianrjRoyal Road
★ 1.0
The story is decent and the MC somewhat interesting. My only real gripe with the story which I consider a somewhat big one is that every mission I've seen so far been do this or die. His system isn't there to help him it's there to torture him with his dream till he either fails or snaps and dies. He has had multiple missions back to back already with his life on. We are supposed to believe this fear and stress won't kill him long before he reaches the top? Hell if stress doesn't kill him burnout will.