The Valtite System

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Description

Brian was reviewing a boring spreadsheet at work when the ‘Call to Adventure’ arrived. The Valtite System summoned him to become the hero that would defend Valteria against the impending 'Calamity', a looming catastrophic event that threatens to destroy the world. And he'd totally get around to that, of course, but first, he had a heap of conspiracy theories to take care of.

Join Brian, an insecure office worker, as he teams up with an unconventional crew of aliens to protect the people of Valteria from threats like bipedal alligators, venomous flying snakes, and time-controlling insects. But as he would soon discover, battling monsters isn’t so straightforward when you’re considered a monster yourself.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Fergard

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 100
Views: 45,112

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Community Reviews(4)

Ellen TaylorRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is a great litrpg, and one that will not disappoint readers who are interested in the genre. It hits all the notes, and the tropes are there to enjoy! I found it quite entertaining how he got transported to the world, and if for some reason you don't want to know, I'll hide it with a spoiler in case you want to be surprised in chapter one.
Falling asleep! Too exhausted from mundane work! Annoyed by coworkers! Somehow one or just that combination transported him. Why is this so relatable and hilarious!
Grammar was great. I saw no mistakes, and nothing that pulled me out of the story.
Brian, the main character, is hilarious and it was a joy watching him discover this new system. There was definitely a lot to this system, which was cool to see.
The style was wonderful. Typical third person, but Brian was a good enough character that it never felt like a bore. Mystery made it easy to keep reading, and the style helped with that.
Story, again, great litrpg with comedy elements in there.
Overall I enjoyed this story. It's a great litrpg, and if you're looking for a comical one, this one is for you!
HorribleWriterRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It is a very typical litRPG. I am not a huge fan of the genre personally, but I am not going to hold it against the story. There aren't that many new or unique elements, but I don't think they are really supposed to be there. Nowadays, everyone does things like "LitRPG but the protagonist is XXX". Here, it is a good old classic. Confused protagonist, new world, new powers, new trouble. Even though it is a classical approach to the genre, I wouldn't say it's bad. It brings some really nice world building into the mix and overall just works as a story that is great to read if you're a fan of such books.
Style
Simple. There is not much I can say about it. It's not some extremely post-modern fragmented mosaic or anything trying to be too fancy. It is simple, easy to read, and in a way similar to the style of older books from simpler times.
Grammar
I found no issues so far. Sometimes certain words get repeated in a following sentence, but that only happened like two or three times in about 10k words, so I would hardly consider that a problem.
Story
Slightly slower at the beginning. The first chapter is pretty much just the protagonist's old life and then we spend the first few chapters going through all the classics of portal fantasy. MC gets confused, MC thinks it's not real, MC meets a secondary character, who doesn't like them at first. It feels quite generic, and I think that is kind of the point, but personally, I'd say the structure and how things flow is a bit too generic for my tastes.
Characters
Honestly pretty good and with a dash of realism. MC is very much your typical working-class man with a difficult job and knowledge of pop culture. Just what you would expect from this genre. Supporting characters are then a bit more unique, but ultimately are just inhabitants with troubles of their own. I'd say that if the situations were to actually happen, the characters would act exactly the way they do. Their behaviour makes sense, which makes them super easy to foll
Raj Ch, AuthorRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This is indeed a highly enjoyable read, sticking closely to the typical format of lit RPGs and executing it almost flawlessly. It appears to be primarily tailored for fans of the genre. While I won't assert myself as a lit rpg enthusiast, I have read a few works within this genre, and I must say that this narrative seems to be going in a very promising direction.
The writing style maintains simplicity, utilizing accessible language. As a non-native English speaker, I find such accessibility comforting.
The grammar is clean; there is nothing to complain in that regard.
The characters are well-crafted and engaging. Particularly, I developed a fondness for the main character who embodies the persona of an everyday individual. He resonates with me, capturing the essence of my own reactions in similar situations.
The story is enjoyable with a perfect pacing that effectively establishes the world while maintaining a steady progression of the story. That is commendable.
The world-building is remarkably impressive. It's difficult to fathom the level of effort required to construct an entirely distinct world, complete with diverse plants and creatures. As a fantasy writer myself, I tend to draw heavily from real-life sources, so encountering this type of intricate world-building both excites me and sparks a twinge of envy, considering the ambitious scope of such an endeavor.
I've added this to my favorites, and I eagerly anticipate experiencing more of this content as it unfolds over time.
Rookie12Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This review is based on the first six chapters.
The story's premiere is rather classic. Our MC is from planet Earth, ends up being transported to another universe, is given a system, faces dangers, and meets various people, making friends and foes.
However, what sets this story apart from the others is how this system works. The MC doesn't just allocate points; he has to perform a physical activity (for example, to level up a strength attribute with unspent points, the MC has to perform, for example, lifting). This makes the story a bit more interesting, for the MC physically can't risk leveling up his attributes mid-combat (or he may dump them into something stupid), and he also needs to figure out how to level up other attributes. My only gripe with the style so far is the somewhat lacking description of the characters.
Grammar. I am a non-English speaker, so take everything I say with a grain of salt. But I have found no serious problems or mistakes with the story. Five stars.
Story and worldbuilding. So far, there's not much to say. We have the classic first encounter with monsters and slowly submerge into the setting. Rather than dropping info dumps on us, the author fleshes out the setting with carefully thrown commentaries made by the characters, which allows us to connect the dots. And the potential future antagonists are set up rather nicely with an effective, not OP, initial meeting.
Character. I like the MC so far; his reaction comes naturally to someone who is deeply shocked at this whole transportation into another universe thing. The other characters felt a bit underused, and some of their interactions happened a bit too fast before they got dropped from the story.
Action. Easy to follow, sometimes gory, but never dull. The author has a rich enough vocabulary to make it engaging, even when the enemies don't stand a chance. It is also used to flesh out the worldbuilding, adding more hints about the world's nature using a show-not-tell approach.
All in a