The Unforged Blade: A Swordsman's Destiny

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Description

Tachibana Takeshi is a young man who travels along with his grandfather Takahiro to various shrines and historic places in the shogunate. Hoping to find what happened to his parents, he decides to take up the path of the sword. As they continue on with their journey, an unexpected event occurs which changes Takeshi's life forever, a setback he never expected.

In an unforgiving world where people and blades clash, will Takeshi be able to figure out how to survive? What was the unforgettable event that changed his life?

Follow Takeshi as he embarks on a journey to become strong, as life forges him

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: ZEROkun1015

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Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 13
Views: 6,609

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Community Reviews(1)

O. TourresRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Hello, Thank you for the story.
What I like:
The story is interesting enough to make the reader want to discover the next chapter. The characters are interesting too. The chapters are long enough. The cover art is great. The description makes me want to read.
The dialogues are fine. The characters talk as they would in real life, so there is an immersion to it.
What I believe could be improved:
There are writing problems that make it hard to read: several redundant "that" could be cut; word repetitions, for example, "they were walking" and "we get there" (chap1); the tense switches for no reason it seems; etc. Although it is better in the 3rd chapter, maybe because there is a lot of dialogue and you do dialogue properly.
I don't know if you use Grammarly, but if you don't, I advise installing the plugin and checking what advice it gives, you'll improve your writing a lot this way. You may want to use Grammarly on Google Docs, it gives much valuable advice.
About the style, I can't really tell because it is hidden behind the writing that I find imperfect, so I'm giving the best rating by default.