The Twins of Masylm

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Description

Twin NPCs Llewel and Myr don’t have something that all the others do: a code they’re supposed to follow. When they get the chance to leave their home and learn who they truly are, it’s not quite in the way that they expected. Still, no amount of preparing could help them uncover the things that may be best left forgotten.

In the Side Story, follow Casrane and her companions as they play through the game’s original story. She thought she knew what she was getting herself into, but things are turning out to be a lot more complex than she thought…

These two parts are important to understand the past, the present, and the future of these characters. Only with them—and perhaps some perspectives of others—can the true events be discovered.

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Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2022
Author: MoonlightGardens

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 35
Views: 56,002

Chapters(149 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

KnightravenessRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall, I find this story better than average, with nothing too dire to harp about. In general, there is room to grow and refine, but I am also encouraged that this author can and will do so with time. It isn't a matter of "this needs fixed" or "that's broken". Solely that more experience will make characterization and consistency feel more natural.
What this means though, is that those readers simply looking for a good story to enjoy without the need to critique or judge, will find a sense of pleasantness in exploring this take on what I imagine can be considered a Lite RPG.
Llewel and Myr are twins, though Llewel, older by however little, very much behaves as the older brother. The pair serve as NPCs in a game world, and are on the edge of understanding they've somehow been "unshackled". Whether they are to become companion characters, they are yet uncertain (at least, 10,000 words in). They feel driven to finally leave their home and seek a calling elsewhere, a calling they scarcely understand themselves. They know less about what feels right for them, than they do about what feels *wrong*, and honestly, this is one of the most human aspects to their journey. When they join up with a couple rambunctious Players, it sparks a shift in their role in the game, and the start of adventure to discover the limits of their free will, and their own nature. The author has laid the path for twists and discoveries, and has, at this point, created an opporunity for friendship, growth, and evolution.
Style: Clearly legible and understandable when taken sentence by sentence, but some things, contextually, you take on faith that you'll understand better later. There are a couple minor things here or there that could tighten the delivery. Though chapters are often broken down by PoV (sometimes Llewel, sometimes Myr), the chapters aren't always consistent to that, and whose head into which we're meant to get a glimpse. It's subtle, I'm not even sure the author has noticed, as I ge
Sickened FanficsRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This is a good story, but I think it needs a bit of a punch to make it stand out.
Style (4): The story is written in a smooth and steady style that brings up thoughts of a rainy day read. I imagine this would be an ideal book for someone to snuggle into a window seat while rain is falling outside. There is a still sadness that presents itself throughout the narrative and the dialogue.
It is dialogue heavy and would be great for those readers who prefer dialogue to long descriptions and details. However, if you are like me, you will notice the lack of descriptions and details which makes it hard for you to be sucked into the story. There are no descriptions of what the city or the twins look like. Yes, there is artwork depicting them, but it’s not good for a writer to rely on the art included in their piece. They should always describe their characters’ appearances and the setting. When the twins meet the two players, we are only told that they are wearing colors or types of clothing for the class they belong to. However, we are not told what those colors are or what the clothing looked like.
Lastly, I’m not a fan of writers adding the character name at the top of a section when it is told from that character’s point of view. I just feel it’s not needed. However, I did like the fact that the writer didn’t use charts for things like inventory or item stats. I thought it was great that they integrated these things into the narrative.
Story (4): It is a gamelit story, but I feel that it is missing a lot of the action and dynamics of gamelit. I’m no expert on gamelit but I do like the ones that have action and describe the conflict. When the twins met the players for the first time and got into a fight, the writer never described the actions which made the scene feel unfulfilled. Another thing, the two main characters weren’t mentioned as twins until chapter five. Yes, the readers can assume that the two are twins, but a writer should never assume that a reader will auto
fakerdakerhahahaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Fellow gamers, have you ever wondered how neat it would be if there is a game where the NPCs themselves are aware of the state of their world? How do you think they would react to knowing that the very cornerstones of their existence are made up by a couple of nerds sitting in some downtrodden shack somewhere? Will they be shocked and confused? Will a crisis of faith befall them? Will anger and desperation overtake their actions? Well…
There is none of that here… Honestly, I’m a bit baffled that NPCs are so nonchalant with such a revelation… Then again, this novel might be a jab at the realistic depiction of how us “non NPCs” might react once we learn about the simulation we’re all living in
Style and Story:
Despite being qualified as a GameLit, the novel reads more like a fantasy story with some game elements being thrown into the mix. There is a mystery that tugs at the readers every now and then with some man-in-black serving as the bigger scope villain. The reason said villain has been hunting our protagonists is because, well, AI learning to think on their own is bad, which is fair enough. After all, those sci-fi books and movies about robot revolution certainly haven’t painted a pretty picture in our mind
However, what keeps me scratching my head is the fact that every NPC doesn’t really seem to care about their state all that much. They are “not comfortable talking about it”, which might mean that they have been pondering their meaning of existence and still grieving over such. However, it is difficult for readers to sympathize with it when the story itself doesn’t put much focus into that line of thought. This is especially noticeable in the twin’s case, who are supposed to be the main victims of this tragedy. I feel like I should feel sorry for them since their life goal, which is just saving up enough money to go somewhere and live their own life, is constantly dashed by one thing or another. However, I just can’t, which is a real shame
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