The Titleist
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Description
After the world is turned into a real life video game, lazy IT guy John is left alone in an office building with a bunch of women that are no longer human and way out of their depth in this new video game based world. With 3 of the women having difficulty with their new bodies and with random class assignments landing him with a seeminly useless class, him angering the goddess who was sent to tell him the details of his class and most technology inert this may be one starting zone he never gets out of.
Features:
Genre trope inversion: John has no interest in building a harem, or being a leader full time.
A skill system that started off simple and evolved into a complicated mess.
A writer that doesn't take himself too seriously, or even really has any idea what he's doing.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- Dragonfyre4269
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 32
- Views
- 8,873
Chapters(10 total)
- Quest 2: Happy Tots Day-Care Part 5: The Darkest of ShadowsAug 28, 2019
- Quest 2: Happy Tots Day-Care Part 4: 9 Woman Party, and 1 man.Aug 16, 2019
- Quest 2: Happy Tots Day-Care Part 3: Gym RattFeb 22, 2019
- Quest 2: Happy Tots Day-Care Part 2: The Lone MonkFeb 13, 2019
- Quest 2: Happy Tots Day-Care Part 1: Setting OutFeb 7, 2019
- InterludeFeb 4, 2019
- Quest 1: Scouting Mission Around the Nordstrom Building. Part 3: The Outdoor CenterFeb 2, 2019
- Quest 1: Scouting Mission Around the Nordstrom Building. Part 2: Working Out the KinksFeb 1, 2019
- Quest 1: Scouting Mission Around the Nordstrom Building. Part 1: Venturing OutsideJan 31, 2019
- IntroductionJan 28, 2019
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Community Reviews(2)
- GeneticfreakRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0Great story so far, the grammar is good but the line breaks are really weird and can make it difficult to read at times.
The plot is good so far, a little on the slow side which will probably put off some people but I’m enjoying it thoroughly.
The style is fine, I haven’t noticed any inconsistency or anything like that.
The only problem I can see is in the characters. The characters all seem fairly interesting and reasonably unique compared to each other. Some of them can act a little one dimensional at times though and having the MC being basically the only one that is capable of thinking critically is an easy trap to fall into, maybe try to not have all the characters completely rely on him for anything remotely team/system/strategy related.
People can be foolish especially in stressful situations but it seems on that none of them even have passing experience with video games and some even go so far as to ignore notifications because they just want MC to deal with it all.
Also his interactions with Jackie are strange, I get that she dislikes him but the pettiness of the reasoning and the constant belittling (which is also from everyone, it’s not like he got to choose his class) makes the conflict feel extremely forced since he is as stated above doing everything that even requires half a brain cell but they and especially Jackie act like he’s completely useless and does nothing. He may as well have saved Jackie’s life in the second chapter for gods sake.
Overall I’m enjoying the story very much but there is definitely room for improvement, a lot of the issues are likely just teething problems that you’ll naturally grow to fix as you get more experience as a writer.
Good job so far and keep it up! - Mister BillRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Really good so far. Certainly an interesting story and an interesting take on the apocalyptic style LITRPG story.
Here’s hoping for more!