The Stickmen Battlegrounds
Self-Published
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Description
There are 2 teams, the villains and the heroes and they battle for the world.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2025
- Author
- dubjake
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.8/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 192
Chapters(2 total)
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- b0b6000Royal Road★★★★★ 4.5Engaging Start: The story drops the reader right into the middle of an intriguing and action-packed moment. This creates curiosity and excitement, especially with the intense battle described early on.
Intriguing Lore: The explanation of awakenings, techniques, and special moves hints at a larger, well-thought-out world. Concepts like "Fist of Flaming DEATH" and "Gas Technique" give a sense of creativity and power.
Mysterious Narrator: The unidentified narrator adds an air of mystery. Their direct address to the reader ("you're probably wondering") builds engagement and feels interactive.
Character Setup: James' struggle after the battle makes him relatable, showing vulnerability even in the face of great power.
Pacing and Clarity: While the battle description is exciting, it feels rushed. Slowing down to describe key moments (e.g., the villains' awakening or James' special attack) could enhance immersion. Paint a vivid picture of what’s happening so readers can fully visualize the action.
Dialogue Flow: Some dialogue feels abrupt or disconnected. For instance, Harry’s departure after asking James if he's okay could include more emotional depth or context to their relationship.
Worldbuilding Integration: The narrator’s explanation of techniques, awakenings, and special moves is detailed but feels like an info-dump. Integrate this information naturally into the story by showing it in action or through conversations between characters.
Narrator’s Role: The mysterious narrator is intriguing but might come across as overly expository. Giving the narrator a bit more personality or hinting at their connection to the story (rather than delaying their reveal entirely) could strengthen their role.
Grammar and Style: Some sentences are missing punctuation, and capitalization is inconsistent (e.g., “i’ll” should be “I’ll,” and “you're” should be “you’re”). Tidying up these errors will improve readability.
The chapter sets the stage for an exciting world filled with action, mys