The Shadow That Preludes Death (The Favoured)

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Magic and fantastical beasts run wild on the countless worlds of the Fabric. Deities take an active interest in the Fabric. The Favoured, immortal mages of immense power vie for territory and power in the Fabric.

Umbra a naive ward of the Duke is almost Grown and that means she will need to take an apprenticeship. The issue is she isn't good at anything, but she catches the eye of a master of magic, he thinks she might be one of the fabled Protectors the ones that would save them from the coming destruction. But Umbra isn't the hero everyone wants her to be.

Updates will at least one chapter every two days.

Notable Location Poliagoras.

Poliagoras is the most important world in the Fabric partly due to it being the centre of everything both literally and metaphorically. Trade, commerce, travel, and politics are all conducted primarily on Poliagoras, it has the biggest city in the fabric stretching to cover almost the entire world. It also holds all the known Great portals in the Fabric which are the only way to travel to other worlds.  Even without these things, Poliagoras would still be the most important world in the Fabric as it is home to the largest population of Favoured. They were mages chosen by the Deities and given the potential to become more than mortal.

I cannot overstate how appreciated constructive criticism is. This is the first story I have written of my own volition so even a small comment on how I could improve would be great.

The current title is most definitely a working one. I know it isn't great.

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2019

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4.4/ 5.0
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11,444

Chapters(27 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • The ReviewerRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    Good job man! You decided to write a novel. This review is as of chapter 2.
    Story is good so far. I’d prefer a little bit more action and a little less conversation, but that’s just my opinion. Other’s opinions could differ but I think it could be improved.
    Grammar is ok. There’s multiple spots where the grammar during a dialogue passage is a bit off. Otherwise, during prose, it’s mostly perfect.
    Lastly, character. The character is relatable and nice to read about what she does. Character development is not yet close it my standards but that’s probably because I’ve only read 2 chapters.
    Here’s your first advance review and I hope it wasn’t too demotivating!