The Saint Likes Me, But I’m Screwed… [Rewrite]

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One early spring day, Alum and his classmates fell victim to a spatial quake—descending to Lethren, a world filled with elemental magic and wonder. Yet, even with the supernatural, Alum remained aloof; whichever world—it didn’t matter. Monsters the form of man, beast, or abomination—it never changed.He knew he wasn’t always alone, but he never thought to have deserved such kindness. To those who gave him paint, now was the time to pay it back, especially in the vivid horrors of the new world—surviving the wilderness.Then, along the way, colors began to seep into the garden, blossoming greens, painting blues, and budding reds. His heart throbbed a funny way for the first time—he’d fallen in love with Amethely at first sight after arriving in the peaceful metropolis, Ilifel.Once, a girl, whom he did not know, revealed to be the Imperial Saint—Could I pursue this? He coolly contemplated, looking at the options. However, change could never be easy for someone like him. How long would it take for a newly rinsed blade to stain?—An elegant Saint with silver-gray hair and pink amethyst eyes was regarded as one of the most prominent light mages in the empire. A girl who was once always in the shadow of her sister, obsessed with research and the path of the sword, with a wish to carry on her late grandmother’s legacy—fell in love.He was a foreigner with soft golden eyes and jet-black hair—a somewhat clueless expression yet charming nonetheless.New to love, Amethely didn’t know what to do, but she knew she wanted to see him again. Thus, she hoped to run into him again, at the same place, at the same time.This time, she wanted to know his name, and for him to know hers, so that one day, even if their love doesn’t blossom, that light would pierce into his ashen world.

NOTE: This is rewritten from scratch so old chapters are gone, poff. But... since people sometimes ask me about it, here's the pdf for all of it, if you want the epub version just dm me or smt, dunno.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pm4kOijs5-CXcCJdU8-wvgPERkLaPrVD/view?usp=sharing

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2026
Author: Seseal

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 107
Views: 15,911

Chapters(72 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

flyingfinchRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I’ve been here since the last version of this and I must say I’m loving it, yes the writing could be better but so can everyone else’s writings too. The story is great and the new details and style of writing is amazing, keep doing what you’re doing!
If you like a nice heartfelt romance with a bit of comedy and tragic backstory’s that will make you want to give the character a hug then this is the story for you.
Dr. RedRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
When introducing the story and characters, the author was creative in the way they performed their isekai. No truck-kun hit and run this time sorry to say. Personally I find this story heart-warming and intriging, the ml and fl get together pretty quick and none of that prolong gruesome waiting time for the two to get together, and one can clearly see/feel how much the two care for one another. The setting is intriguing as it is in a fairly advanced magic/technological world which gives a nice change of setting compared to the usual isekai.
For grammer I personally don't find it that bad, its readable and although the start is confusing, by using some simple quick deduction and a little trick I learned called pushing forward, you would quickly find that the confusion quickly clears up.
For future progress I hope that the author doesn't make the mistake of having the world revolve around the mc like so many isekai fall into. What I mean is that just because the mc enters a ruin or goes on a queat, doesn't mean something unusual or special needs to happen. i find that takes away from the story and makes the world seem less special (I don't know how to properly explain it). I'm fine with the thing here or there in order to progress story but one shouldn't forget that there should be normal event like completing a quest without a monster stampede suddenly appearing or a monster that shouldn't be in the area all of the sudden being there. Sometimes its nice to have normal stuff happen or an special event happening to someone who isn't the ml or fl. I find it adds more "realism" to the story.
Overall I really like this story and think it has some amazing potential. But please keep in mind you might disagree with me as my opinion may be a little biased. As I've read lot of truly terrible stories with amazing grammer and writing and truly amazing stories with garbage writing and grammer. But so far I really like this story and find the grammer pretty good.
IndicusRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I'll say two chapters in not too bad the author tends to over explain like saying a girl likes the park because the animals are adorable then explains they are intelligent and won't harm anyone.
It can break up the pacing when it happens but I am only two chapters in. And so far seems it will be interesting.
Tip for the author for some little things like a park with animals and the animals not being dangerous leave the explanation of why the animals are not dangerous out it can easily be assumed animals in the park are safe or a park in the middle of a city wouldn't let them be there.
But anyway give this a try and I will update my review when I'm further along.
Update chapter 16
So far the over explaining has lessened and got to some action scenes and they are okay not the best but not horrible either. I don't have enough knowledge to make suggestions there but anyway. The story quality is slowly increasing good job author
EugenioRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
As a premise I must said that , since I only read the first two chapters, my opinion on the story itself is quite worthless. I know nothing about it but I had to give a score in order to write an advanced review. I based my vote on the media score.
Character: We know almost nothing about him. While it may sound normal since the early review, in this case it's not. Apart from a scant few thoughts there no internal monologue at all and he doesn't show any kind of emotions about this shocking life-changing event. This is all thyere is to say about the protagonist. The other characters are not even worth mentioning.
Style: the Author said he that he "used another style that I changed" so I can only review the style that he uses for the first 15 chapters. It's choppy, the timeskips that he use are badly placed,since he cuts a lots of interesting parts of the initial chapters, like for example the first few hours. As I already said, the almost total absence of internal thoughts denies an understanding of the caracters. The phrases are all short as the few descriptions are. Same for the dialogues.
Grammar: Here comes the biggest flaw of this story. Use of the wrongs words, confusion between the tenses, phrases that are unnecessary hard to understand and the strange use of commas instead of : to start some dialogues.
To be clear with "wrong words" I mean that he wrote "extract information from him" with the probable meaning of a non violent trough interview to understand his world or his role in it. I said probable because there was another timeskip ,to my opinion badly placed, that glossed all over his first interaction with the people controlling the city place he's brought to. One of the reasons that make me dislike this timeskip is that he apparently has a problem of unknown-but-could-be-big-entity, that is ignored for all the rest of the chapter. In this case is especially glaring the lack of feelings of the protagonist since he doesn't even express his reli
JoplingRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Okay, I don't know what compelled me to add this work to my "to read later" pile, if it was a recommendation or the cover artwork, but that being said... so far I'm not impressed. To elaborate:
The first chapter at least, and I'm hesitant to continue, but probably will for a couple more, feels very, very much like the translation of a Light Novel. And perhaps a bad one--whether this qualifier refers to the light novel-ness or the translation I'll leave for others to decide. In any case, this feeling is based on what light novels I've read so far, and the common methods and writing practices I noticed with them. In particular it's the sparsity of description in people and surroundings that jumps out to me, which, again, is par for the course for light novels, which focus more on the events than their setting up or description. Furthermore there's the jump in narrative point of view: while the main character is called "Alum", we're also treated to the thoughts of "Noel","Emely", and "Chelys" on occasion. This would ordinarily help to illustrate their thoughts and better characterise them, but is instead mostly used as a tool to provide an outside perspective on "Alum".
Lastly, grammatical conventions are flaunted: why the heck are | used as a means to bracket thoughts? At points the inflationary use of italics robs the sentence of any emphasised meaning the italics was supposed to impart.
In summary, I'm somewhat at a loss what to think of this work.
So, I've read a couple more chapters, but no further. My tolerance is met, and my curiousity isn't piqued to such a degree that I can overlook the story's grammatical shortcomings. If it was only the light novel-like style of writing, I could live with that, but the many minor typos and inconsistencies exceed my tolerances.
I wish the author good luck, but hope they'll make use of an editor before any publication as an ebook or the like.