The Rise of Rose

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

reil-rhiil

• Ch. 6 Gossips and murderers
  Jun 4, 2018
• Ch. 5 Bearers of bad news
  May 28, 2018
• Ch. 4 We all come from somewhere
  May 24, 2018
• Ch. 3 When trouble finds you
  May 19, 2018
• Ch. 2 Lessons
  May 7, 2018
• Ch.1 Another day, another fight.
  May 5, 2018
• Prologue, An average night.
  May 5, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• MachomachoteRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  This story sets out to weave an intricate tapestry of character-driven moments, world-building, and emotional depth but fails spectacularly in its execution. Its ambition is evident, but the narrative collapses under the weight of its own unwieldy structure and lack of cohesion.
  The style struggles to find balance, oscillating between verbose descriptions and clunky dialogue. The frequent shifts in tone—from awkward humor to somber introspection—are jarring rather than dynamic, leaving readers unsure of the intended atmosphere. While the text occasionally attempts to evoke emotion or tension, the overwrought prose and excessive tangents drown any potential impact.
  The plot meanders aimlessly, with no clear direction or purpose. Chapters overflow with excessive exposition, dragging the pace to a crawl. Events occur without meaningful stakes or progression, creating a sense of aimlessness that makes it difficult to care about what happens next. Attempts to add depth through side narratives, like Violet’s visit to the orphanage, feel forced and distract from the central story, which is already tenuous at best.
  The characters are one-dimensional and inconsistent. While Rose has potential as a protagonist, her personality is muddled by repetitive reactions and poorly executed moments of introspection. Supporting characters, such as Violet and the urchins, exist as caricatures or plot devices rather than fully realized individuals. The story hints at emotional backstories but lacks the finesse to explore them effectively.
  Technically, the writing is riddled with flaws. Run-on sentences, redundant phrasing, and an over-reliance on clichés create a tedious reading experience. The sheer volume of irrelevant details overwhelms the narrative, and the lack of editing is painfully obvious.
  Conclusion:
  This story attempts to build a compelling world and cast but ultimately crumbles under poor execution and lack of focus. What could have been a gritty tale of survival and ambition