The Revenge of the Devil of Conquest Vol.1

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Description

The Revenge of the Devil of Conquest, it's a story about Shi, who's his sister comes back into his life takes him into a different zone of Japan, while Shi has unlocked a new power that was unleashed, after an unfortunate bloody event. This Dark power and now became a half human has now given him the strength, to become something more than an average person. Is this power a gift or is it a curse? Whatever it is, Shi intends to use it in order to bring about a better world.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Akiba's

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Rating: 1.8/ 5.0
Followers: 5
Views: 12,618

Chapters(14 total)

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PrimeKnightRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Holy shit the nightmare! Wtf with those sentences and grammar it's making me crazy,I know I'm not good at english but yours is so bad that it's hard to read dont be mistaken her sir. What I mean is your story is good and unique with being a another dimension and magic in modern world is rare only few use it,this creation of yours does have a potential but with too many grammatical and sentences errors it will only destroy your work.
My solition to this is after you finish your chapt edit it yourself find the mistakes and ask your reader for miatakes and plot hes ao you could improve your writhing and story work.
This work of yours is tottaly unpolish jewel with many muds and rocks but still it can be polish with some expert or knowlegable peoples help as I could only give some pointers here and there this is only the thing I could say.
1:Type capital I when it was used.
2:After finishing the chapt read it again and find some mistakes that you can find and let the knowlegable people take care of the big miatakes(if they were willing)
3:If your using a Cellphone then download an app with auto correct grammar and sentence with an icon of G(I think it's inside of circle with binge name,I dont know if I'm correct with the name)
4:slow down your story,too fast and it would end faster or be dropped(wish we didnt want)
5:Post a chapter when you think about the whole arc or volume doesnt matter if there's so many plot holes as your still a newbie you still have a chance of improvement.
Thats all,I wish you with great future and prosper in the path you took.
PrimeKnight at your command ;-)