The phantom assassin

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2016

Author

Tiān gōng shén yàn

• Eh really that's a surprise
  Apr 2, 2016
• picking a god kinda
  Apr 1, 2016
• The end before the beginning
  Apr 1, 2016

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• Forgiv3n324Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  So your style, is o.k, not to shabby, but nothing spectacular either so 4/5.
  Story, don’t really want to judge it as only three chapters in, but if it keeps going the way it is and as fast paced as it is than 3 stars is generous.
  Grammar, your weakest link by far please get a proof reader or use spell check a lot of your errors would be fixed with spell check.
  Character: Everything is so rushed in your story that your characters just seem to accept everything that is throw at them no matter how ridiculous which is just cringe worthy and makes your characters bad, like when you described his past life the whole anger/feels when he finds his wife NTRing the fuck out of him is gone since she doesn’t even get a name she only speaks one line, and at that it’s just to spout some bs line for her life. The elders of his village? A village? he blew up Area 51 so 2 me that implies that this is Earth that he started off in and it’s at least in modern times so… why do they live in a village? It’s not bad that they live in a village but EXPLAIN it, don’t just assume all these little details that don’t matter can be ignored as it makes the story lose its flare.
  Another bad point in your characters is that like I said before just accept everything, dude dies, meets gods&godesses, just like ok picks the godesse of sluts because she’s hot, and bam thats it doesn’t ask any real questions no why’s? nothing and as an ASSASSIN he should prioritize information gathering than BOOBS AND ASS like seriously.
  Anyways I hope as a first review this isn’t to harsh and wants you to quit writing, but the road your going down is bad if you want to be a professional author or anything that has to do with writing really. Thought if your only doing this for pure entertainment and have no goals to further your writing skills than well… keep doing you than.