The park master.

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2017

Author

marcstef

• there is a rewrite of card master. park master rewrite is in progress
  Feb 14, 2023
• Chapter 11 ride back to home
  Aug 7, 2018
• Chapter 10 visit to the town
  Jul 30, 2018
• Chapter 9 Steve
  Jul 30, 2018
• Chapter 8 A long day
  Jul 29, 2018
• Chapter 7 level up
  Jul 28, 2018
• chapter 6 arrived proofread
  Apr 7, 2017
• chapter 5 meanwhile proofread
  Apr 6, 2017
• chapter 4 shopping proofread
  Apr 4, 2017
• chapter 3 A new home proofread
  Apr 4, 2017
• chapter 2 the park proofread
  Apr 3, 2017
• Chapter 1 Happy birthday edited new version
  Apr 3, 2017

Reviews

Community Reviews(4)

• Arashi ZarosRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  instead of dungeon crystal or something like that,we have a park crystal ,wonder what will be going next,but the author really need a editor and proofreader since some sentences and grammar are not right,but still readable a bit
  edited:after I give him a link to a website that help a bit in fixing grammar and sentence it more readable now  ,but  he still need a proofreader and the way he execute is bit too rough (it like he is still learning english) but he do getting better a bit so if you can you should help him point out a bit
  edit:finally,he get the proofreader now and all the chapter have been proofread so you guy should try to read it from the start again since there is somce change in it
• PCarrson77Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  I think you have a great premise, the main character is going to be a Park Master, which sounds like some kind of druid, gardener, dungeon master cross from what I can gather.
  The problem though is this story is complete wish fufillment and reads like a middle schooler wrote it. On his birthday he suddenly gets tons of money, land, and everything handed to him. Then you have the mayor personally give him the exact two classes that he wants and his parents buy him not only a 'park crystal' but even a house, a massive tract of land, and a flying island. This is all in the first chapter, do you see my point.
  You talked about how a normal family needs 3 gold a year to survive but then you have his siblings, parents, grandparents, and friends all giving him hundreds of gold not even counting the land, park crystal, and other stuff. I get that they are probably rich because they have a park crystal as well but you need to mention that.
  Good idea but currently has poor execution and reads like a complete wish fufillment. (I think you should keep writing but you really need to consider a rewrite will probably be necessary in the future if you want more people to read it.)
• CooookieeeesssssRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  I wrote a long review that got lost after I made an account, if you would like to know what it said message me on twitch, but you need help. I know you said you got a proof reader, but more than one would be helpful, I'm willing to help if you want. And if you didn't get it from my name, my twitch username is cookiemoonstr
• ImpalerRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  The author has great ideas, the collaboration of a park crystal instead of a dungeon working together with a human to achieve their goals are great. However, his grammar, dialogue, and flow are abhorring, his grammar is incorrect with random capital letters. His dialogue is linear and lack characteristics of the character while his flow jumps around with no transition. The only positive comment I can make is his ideas, if he can but his thought to words and slow down his story could be a big hit.