The overpowering dragon's tale

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2015

Author

renimon20

• Chapter 05
  Feb 2, 2016
• Character pictures and illustrations from now on
  Jan 3, 2016
• Chapter 04
  Dec 13, 2015
• Chapter 03
  Dec 3, 2015
• Change in viewpoint
  Dec 3, 2015
• Chapter 02 Lord of the Forest
  Dec 2, 2015
• Chapter 01 Desperate times call for desperate actions
  Dec 2, 2015

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• RotaRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Better than some others attempts that we can find on the site, but nothing shocking or attracting. Another cookie-cutter, reincarnation turned OP Protagonist, with dragons.
  The grammar may be free of nearly all spelling errors. However, it still contains plenty of other distracting and poorly thought out points. The first issue is the change in PoV without a proper set-up or adjusting of the content. If you are writing a story pick a view and stick to it, unless your writing style involves changes of PoV as part of the story progression (for example multiple main core characters or needed view of god moments).
  The 2nd issue, in regards to the grammar, is directed mainly towards the first two chapters (though still an issue in the next 2). This is referring to the dragon as ‘he’ and then in the same sentence following it up with ‘it’. It is important to know how you view the characters in your story so that we as readers know how to see them too.
  And the 3rd issue, are you interested in your story or not? A lot of the writing seems passive and plays down any importance the scene may have otherwise had. Make the reader feel involved and not like they are watching a slideshow. We get needlessly complicated descriptions about how a bear-lion looks, but there is no need to try and forge a particular picture in the reader’s head, it will just confuse and mislead, leave that kind of detail to the artists if you end up getting a profile done.
  As for the characters, the behavior is just too erratic and unrelatable.  Nothing more needs to be said there.
  Plot – too little to judge the long-term, but in the short term: 4 chapter in and nothing to convince me to keep reading. In a book, that would be your welcoming section, the part you first see that makes you decide whether to keep reading or put it back on the store shelf. (this applies even to ‘free ebooks’ for those who wish to be pedantic.) That is your only chance to make an impression on a new reader and make them want t