The Order of the Stag

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Description

Nalion is thrown outside of his comfortable research-bubble as he receives a warning from a nature spirit. He is instructed to find three ingredients and to combine them at a specific spot in order to cleanse the corruption slowly spreading its tendrils.

Conveniently, the first ingredient leads Nalion to the graves of the secret society called the Order of the Stag, where he meets up with Erevan - a gruff ranger with a (secret!) diary and a notable drinking problem - as well as Hama. She just wants to get paid and avenge her parents' fiery murders. Is that too much to ask?

And what’s up with the book Nalion found? Ilias’ magic is quite strange as well, hmm… Surely notat allconnected to an ancient eldritch tentacle god of horror and madness.

Featuring: Nalion’s love of books, Erevan’s love of beer and Hama’s love of sarcasm. Meanwhile Ilias just wishes to not fall flat on his face yet again, thank you very much.

"Book of the year!" - My husband.

"Wääh!" - My baby.

"Woof woof!" - My dog.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2024
Author: iamboulder

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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Views: 5,286

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Elijah TalbotRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
INTRODUCTION:
As the title of this review implies. This is more of a critique of the work than an actual review (as stated in the review swap in the thread). Meaning, I am more or less focused on communicating with the author than you, the reader of this review and of this story. However, even if this might contain heavy spoilers, they will be behind the spoiler tag so you can have a chance of going into this story blind. So keep in mind when reading this. This review isn’t intended for you, but for the author. However, if you want to read this critique. Feel free to stay. Just know there will be spoilers and I will break down aspects of the story to illustrate my point.
Before I continue, I want to lay down some ground rules. Contrary to popular belief, critiques should not be mean, nor should they only search for flaws in the story. I say this because that is reductive and achieves nothing, so I will praise when I can. Anything related to what happened in the story will be behind the spoiler tag, regardless of how small it is. I will, however, give a summary. Lastly, I am not an editor. Therefore, I will not offer suggestions for perceived problems, as I believe the author is best suited to find any solutions for them. Instead, I will simply address them and how I felt about them. With that out of the way, let us begin.
STYLE and GRAMMAR:
You can probably tell that both of those scores things are 5 stars and will assume that the style and grammar are perfect. This is contrary to the point. Despite the rating, there are numerous stylistic issues I have seen throughout the narrative.
For instance, there will be moments where the narrative will tell more than it shows. At times, using words that make me want to feel a certain emotion besides using the narrative and characters to get me to feel a certain way. The descriptions are not strong as they should be. Often being very short or rushed within the presentation. Another problem I want to point out is scene transit