The One You Cannot Escape ( On Hold Until Further Notice)

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Description

This is a story about something that has existed since the beginning. This is a story about death i know what your thinking and no i don't mean death i mean the literal being know as Death.(I have very bad grammar so if you aren't fine with that don't read it i will be writing 1-3 chapters a day more if i really feel like it other than that enjoy.)

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
Dialioe

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTURECOMEDYTRAGEDYMULTIPLE LOVERSROMANCE SUBPLOT

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Rating
4.3/ 5.0
Followers
46
Views
14,955

Chapters(10 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • Forgiv3n324Royal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    *Review is done with Six chapters out so later on this review will probably be outdated  (I HOPE LOL)*
    Style: Your style is fine, borderline standardized really, which is why you get 4 stars cause it’s… well not unique. (Cause unique styles imo deserve 5 stars)
    Story: Bit early for the story, but im going to go based of a lot of the other stories with similarly start off ancient all powerful beings, and take a gander and say there will be no ‘real’ plot and it will wander from place to place (hope you prove me wrong). But so far story is entertaining at the very least, and I enjoyed reading up till this point and hope you continue.
    Grammar: This is by far your weakest link. I honestly don’t want to go to into depth and point out every single little flaw in grammar, cause well English is a bitch and has way to many grammar rules that aren’t really ‘rules’ cause they’re are way to many ‘unique’ situations in which we break those ‘rules’ so they arent really rules… (srry for the rant that had nothing to do with your story…) but ANYWAYS… The biggest trn off for me are the overly large text blocks… break them up please.
    Character: Bit shallow not going to lie its also your next largest weak link. your 4 beings of: Death, Life, Darkness, and Light (thought only Death, and Light have been introduced) are probably the only characters that seem to have a solid character depth. These two companions he has so far are wayyyyy to clingy and seem to have a phobia of being abandoned when they have never been abandoned before in their life (besides the mother dying but death and abandonment are two different things and how can DEATH be afraid of death… jesus the conundrum). It also seems that every person he runs into is in some way literally the trash of humanity so unless like literally the entire human population is just trash in this world he runs into way to many of them in a row… (for anyone who thinks the knight and merchant weren't trash, the knight is probably the only goo