The Observer Thought

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Description

I was studying for an exam once, and I just couldn't get my mind right. Instead of studying as much as I could that day, I ended up thinking about a silly scenario about people watching eachother.

In the end, I passed.

- Asbebjorn

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2025
Author: Asbebjorn

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Rating: 3.0/ 5.0
Followers: 2
Views: 113

Chapters(1 total)

The Observer Thought
Mar 9, 2025

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RznRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
This is interesting, from a 2nd person POV about observing and being observed. The prose is casual and well, awkward, because it runs through with telling what you are doing from a distant tone. This is immediately a problem as it clashes with the sense of self, something that 2nd person POV is always shakey about. The problem is with lines that being with "So, you are" and "And so, you" over and over again. Making the reader very aware they are being told what they are doing. The narrative comes crashing down and immersion cannot happen. It just doesn't work as is and it is because of the prose and the POV clash.