The Mountain Lord

Self-Published

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Description

On the world of Camcesa, humanity stands at the brink of war. Facing the end of their race, the desperate leaders of mankind turn to a divine relic. In their darkest hour, they summon humans from another world to fight for them— as the Prophecy had foretold.

Karth was a prisoner minding his own business, just trying to serve out his sentence. Called upon against his will, Karth was summoned to another world. A new world of magic and black powder, and most importantly his freedom. Soon he finds himself with a noble title he did not want, caught in the middle of a war that was not his, court intrigues, power struggles, and a forced marriage.

Faced with the ugly truth of his new home, Karth is forced to make a choice— change his values, or change the world.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2020
Author: D.H.Hansen

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Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 1,343
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Community Reviews(10)

DivineCatRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's a good quality story that I recommend you should read.
The magic so far has been good.
the background is shaping up nicely.
the characters are flawed but readable.
the grammar is better than most stories on this site.
its been highly entertaining to read and I'll be bookmarking it so I'll be notified of future chapters.
Droy17Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It was enjoyable and engaging. I like the mc personality although he was quite rough dealing with people he has still some decency. There's not much to the story yet.
Give it a try.
EddieAzevedoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I strongly recommend it to anyone who enjoys a story with a touch of magic, harem and strong scenes.
Without mimimi here is for the strong.
Interesting villains, very real protagonist and many plots.
I recommend it to everyone.
toddRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I had some reservations about whether I was going to continue reading this after the first five chapters. The protagonist starts by being summoned directly out of prison, and after smartly not causing a fuss during the summon (even accounting for mind-control), immediately starts antagonizing just about everyone he can. To the point where it's just a hair under suicidal. Justifications are written into the story and character development: anger issues, being used to prison behavior, and having a functional moral compass, but for someone who watched his summon-mates be executed based off of skin color and gender, he makes literally no effort to learn about the new magical world he's found himself in or what not to do to avoid being killed. It's frustrating, to say the least.
Other than that, this story is great. It's a classic fish out of water in a wildly dysfunctional and oppressive empire. While the early chapters are hit or miss, around chapter XII, things start to smooth out, the MC begins to behave as though he might like to live, and the world begins to flesh out. There's still conflict but the majority of it is along lines that were going to be problems anyway and a path begins to clear towards what will eventually be the primary antagonist. It's a significant improvement over watching Karth slam face-first into everyone he meets that isn't enslaved as the author starts to allow for character growth.
Overall, I would say that the beginning is rough as the author gets a little carried away with hammering in the character flaws, but the fundamental story is both intriguing and solidly written. Each chapter goes down a little smoother and by chapter 15 I was completely pulled into the story. I look forward to seeing where the rest of it goes.
RichyDaManRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Binged all available chapters, very enjoyable, will keep reading , a few grammer issues but spelling is perfect.
JcW SweRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Good potential, likeable MC, with actual respect of women that is sometimes sadly missing on alot of webnovels. Great premise so far and a story that I kind of can see (I think, maybe) where it's going, and I will be happy to see how the author develops it and potential plot twists and turns. I atleast hope for a slowly evolving story where the MC struggles a bit.
Good grammar, great world building and the character development is smoothly progressing so far. Too early to tell if this will be a good or great story, but I'm hoping for the latter. :)
And as always thanks to the author (and other authors on sites like RR) for taking the time to entertain us with stories like these. :)
MaukkaRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
First book is decent, the second not so much. Too many battles without much meaning.
Also author found a a ridiculously stupid way to mention some current political issues within the story that I found kind of distasteful and disrespectful.
Spoiler: Spoiler
It'd be one thing if he'd have highlighted bunch of other terrible and much worse things that are happening around the world but no, somehow the relatively minor and unimportant matter in American politics is important enough for a goddess of multiple worlds to point to it as an example how awful things are, I suppose the goddess being a terrible person with bad judgement can sort of excuse it as another example of her terrible personality but I doubt that's intended.
TheakornRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Overall, this is a flawed story with decent potential. Writing wise, there is little to be critical about. The text flows nicely with few mistakes, the largest issue is the dialogue could use some work - which puts this ahead of many others here on RR. I could say the same about the worldbuilding - its gritty and dark in the clean anime-way, with a muskets and magic level of technology. Several of the "dark" traditions of the grossly racist and mysogonistic society mimics real, historical traditions, such as tying cleanliness to the enemy. A nitpick here is that the technological development is either not well thought out or poorly explained, at least by the first 15 chapters. Firearms are a few years old, but they have already moved to mass production of flint-locks muskets, which took many centuries of real time devolpment, both in chemistry, metalurgy, infrastructure, military doctrine and so on. This needs some proper explanation down the line to be believable.
Now, all of these issues can be either be improved with some editing or some well thought out explanations. The main issue is the main character. Based on the dialogue in the comment section where the author have answered some of the readers misgivings about how the MC acts, I believe the author have either made a fundamental mistake in crafting him, or have completely failed to communicate his character to the readers. The MC is a cool, calculated, bad ass bank robber, that after 40+ bank robberies wasn't even a suspect to the federal task force that hunted him. After the portal incident he is a petulant, edgy teen that attacks everyone around him and can't help but constantly speak heresy, even to nobles above him in the hierachy. This is not in any way a calculating criminal mastermind. In the last chapter this trend was slightly moderated, but it remains a flaw and only time will tell if this story is worth following.
It will require some writing chops to pull this off, and I am not really certain the
lalasuRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The story itself is good. Anti-hero MC, good worldbuilding, dark fantasy setting, the right amount of gore; I love all of them.
I can rate it somewhere around 4, given that this is a rough draft. But this is unfair to other RR novels, so I can't go easy on it. There are significant problems that should be addressed.
Characters. Twodimensional and featureless. Not enough descriptions, more like static objects. The author often forgets about the input from secondary characters. Sometimes it gets ridiculous. For example, there was an elf girl tortured, but the author skipped on her emotions and description of what she was doing. No screams, no begging, nothing. Like she wasn't there at all.
Too much MC. All his allies are looking insignificant. They barely have screen time. This novel would be much better with multiple POVs.
Static unfeeling world. The author often forgets about important details necessary to turn the story alive. Like, people die, but there is no one to mourn them. Women raped, but no one cries. People win a battle, but no celebration follows. Stuff like that.
The author tells a lot, but seldomly shows. His worldbuilding is excellent, but most often it presented through the author's exposition or MC's thoughts. You can't experience it through action, words, senses, and feelings.
Sensitive content is toned down which in turn makes the story too 'safe'. Contrary to the setting and genre, the author is too cautious. No direct sex scenes, no real torture, no rape. These things are implied but rarely shown directly. When the author tries to show them, it is always bad. You can feel he was too disgusted to write it properly.
Mr. IbisRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Interesting premise with a decent start, but it's just fallen into plodding along for about 20 chapters now. Dialogue just seems more rough than when we started, and new characters are introduced solely to add to the harem or because the OP main character needs to have someone more powerful than him.
Maybe the eventual polish for proper publishing will make this worth picking up, but I can't really recommend this as is.