The Mercenary System

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2017

Author

Hao1250431

• Chapter 13: the beginning of the journey.
  Jul 29, 2017
• Chapter 12: The Night Before the Journey to the Capital.
  Jul 8, 2017
• Chapter 11: a normal day in the town of Venzor.
  Jul 6, 2017
• Chapter 10: Accepting the main mission.
  Jul 5, 2017
• Chapter 9: The power I have gained and the first step of many to come.
  Jul 3, 2017
• A really important pole for the story.
  Jul 3, 2017
• Chapter 8: realization and a true family.
  Jul 1, 2017
• Chapter 7: A new day and magic training.
  Jul 1, 2017
• Chapter 6: one side massacre and the end of the bloody night.
  Jun 30, 2017
• Chapter 5: preparation and a bloody night.
  Jun 29, 2017
• Chapter 4: information about a side quest and a promise to Elena.
  Jun 28, 2017
• Chapter 3: world information, magic affinity and a surprise.
  Jun 27, 2017
• Chapter 2: time skip for 5 year and the process so far.
  Jun 27, 2017
• Chapter 1: A conversation with Alice and time to reincarnate.
  Jun 26, 2017

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• GiantsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I really would reccomend this story. Yes, there are the reccuring themes ofthis book that are in  a lot of  other books here in Royal Road, but it does not take away the the quality of this story. The story is about a man who is reincarnated into a fantasy world with an rpg-like system. There are other stories similar to this, but if you want to read a story like that, read this one. It has a really clear and simple flow to it. The story only has a couple chapters, but so far it has shown to be a prime candidate for one of the great books of Royal Road. I reccomend this book, amd the only flaw I can find is that the characters are not that delved into, and I can not really feel much from them. I can say that it will probably be cleared up later as it is the beginning of the story. Author if you read this, please keep working.
• XintestRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Hi dude
  I hope my review helps you because I really liked the fiction you're writing.
  There are a lot of good points to improve:
  the style is good, you are swiftly using language to express the acts and I liked it.
  the stats balance is good, it is a bit confusing not seeing stats after a lot of changes so I hope you perceive when stats are needed to be shown.
  the world build is a bit vague and not too clear but I think that we are still in the first 10ch so it's ok.
  the grammars can easily be fixed, just use grammarly[grammarly(dot)com] it is free, easy to use, and could level up your writing without mistakes.
  I wish it was a male and not the gender bender thing, but that's my preference.
  I encourage you to continue and keep it up, you have my sincere thanks for this great novel.
• PettyOfficerRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  For the most part, the characters are endearing and kind. But this doesn't make sense considering the character being a ruthless mercenary suddenly becoming completely girlish at a small effort or even why they have the need to maintain a mundane relationship in such a bratty manner.
  Add to the mix a certain batch of key phrases are repeated every chapter, in each chapter and we have a more stale element to the mix. The story progresses slowly while being utterly cliche and the grammar's bad, with some bits here and there being intelligible. Stealing from a comment on one of the chapters, there's a problem with using English tenses where the story is in the past when it should be in the present. The details get sketchy and are somewhat bland in my opinion.
  I bet this is a language barrier holding down the author's thoughts as they do not know English as their native language. For now, the fiction is pretty bare-bones and needs to be fleshed out in descriptions. It's okay for a random read when you're bored, I guess.