The Macaroni Chronicles

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

AlphaZero

• 1-10: The great gwa
  Jun 4, 2023
• 1-9: max
  Jun 3, 2023
• 1-8: the police
  Jun 2, 2023
• 1-7: the xiang chronicles
  Jun 1, 2023
• 1-6: luke dies
  May 31, 2023
• 1-5: Pumped Up Kicks
  May 30, 2023
• 1-4: The waffle man
  May 29, 2023
• 1-3: what the fuck is happening
  May 28, 2023
• 1-2: I don't know
  May 27, 2023
• 1-1: the highest level
  May 26, 2023
• 1-0: cabbage eater
  May 25, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• xiangRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  ok so this story could be perfect I can see some flaws but all in all, I think it could turn it very well the book is very thought out and I can see that the author is trying to make this very long from the foreshadowing(i won't spoil it) and the characters are also fleshed out it kind of frees surreal reading this book tbh I do think you should give this a try and if you don't find it good wait a couple of weeks and try again as the writing is a bit sloppy and he should be trying to fix that in the future.
  (and it's plus that the mc is my name)
• FredBeddersonReadsRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  I don't like this story, and it's only at chapter two! It is quite tasteless and filled with gibberish. I do not wish to discourage you, but this is very not promising and makes you look bad as an author. As a miscellaneous tip, try making your chapters longer, they are extremely short for one every week.
  Style:
  I gave style the lowest score possible, since the style is inconsistent, and I don't really like any of it. For example, consider this except.
  "3-year old Dante Macaroni gwaed into the crowded gas station; he noticed two men acting kinda sussy in the corners. But; he didn’t care. He just wanted his gamer juice for his Celeste speedrun. He walked over to the juice and picked the gamer juice from the juices. That’s when the two sussy imposters walked over to the cash register, guns drawn. It reminded Dante of the GD level, Storming Summit, a level based off the hit video game Celeste."
  It is littered with nonsense, bogus references to things that might exist, or might not, since they are so obscure. Also, the sentence where he picks up the juice is horribly written, not to mention he is literally a toddler. Maybe survey some friends or family to see how they would change some things.
  Story:
  There is certainly a story going on, though it is not very good.
  It starts with a toddler in a gas station, named Dante. He is quickly murdered in a holdup at the gas station. It is implied that he was murdered by Xiang and Jason, who are implied to be ruthless murderers, even willing to kill their own family. Xiang, with the power to teleport, is hinted to be a powerful being of some sort.
  The story is there, but it is presented to the reader in a way where it is very unclear. It also messes with serious topics that I'm not sure the author is able to handle at their current stage. Try toning it down a bit by removing some more extreme elements.
  Grammar:
  In this age of writing the grammar is surprisingly bad. Examples including "Plz," U," and even "O:" Not to mention poor g