The Little Princess

Self-Published

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Description

Once upon a time, there was a kingdom named Avalon. It was a place where magic distinguished the nobility over the common masses. And one of such nobility was our main character, Isolde. She was born to the Duke of Fairchild, an insignificant dukedom near the borders of the kingdom. You would think this means she would have an easy life. Alas, fate decreed otherwise, for a band of raiding orcs invaded to her territory just when her parents were called to the capital. Would she, a mere seven years old, be able to defend her family's realm?

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
Keita123

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTURESLICE OF LIFESHORT STORY

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Rating
2.3/ 5.0
Followers
5
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1,156

Chapters(1 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • StenDuringRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    This review is part of a review swap.
    I've explicitly been asked to focus on the character, and I will do so.
    This is a portrait, with a short, introductionary story added. It's written in FP in a faux 19th century novel / early 20th century children's book style. We have a narrator, maybe 10 years old, referring to her younger self in a longish diary entry.
    Notably her voice is really the voice of a childish 13 year old,  but I'd argue that realistic depictions of characters below the age of 18 is an immediate dealbreaker for the reader, so they think a bit older than their years.
    It's a stuck up aristocrat child making an effort to come put as humble and failing horribly. It's also a very good depiction of the early stages of one person's perception of noblesse oblige combined with the total belief that might makes right. She's got all the preprequisites set up to become a perfect arsehole another five years down the line. A brave and cunning arsehole, cause she's got the brains, and she knows she's got them.
    So for the ratings. I'll gloss over the non-character ones.
    Overall a solid 4 stars. It's doing what it should do well, being a portrait.
    Style is a solid 4 stars. As a reader you don't have to like it, but you should recognise the literary device for what it is. There are a few oddities that could be chalked down to the narrator still being a child with a flawed grasp of language. For the portait there's an unneeded POV-switch to TP without any warnings, whihc is a bit jarring and drags down the overall impression by half a star.
    Story is an OK 3. Well, there isn't much story. Hard to give good ratings to what's not there.
    Grammar is a near perfect 4 stars, after I'm adding half a star as RRL compensation the way I usually do here.
    Character is a near perfect 4.5 stars. The unneeded TP orc-sequence drags down the score by half a star by introducing the 'evilzzzz'. Scrap that and it would have been perfect. This intro doesn't need it. The MC is perfectly rend