The King of Nox

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2024

Author

Nah Ava

• Chapter 9
  Mar 2, 2024
• Chapter 8
  Feb 23, 2024
• Chapter 7
  Feb 16, 2024
• Chapter 6
  Feb 10, 2024
• Chapter 5
  Feb 2, 2024
• Chapter 4
  Jan 26, 2024
• Chapter 3
  Jan 26, 2024
• Chapter 2
  Jan 25, 2024
• Chapter 1
  Jan 18, 2024
• Prologue
  Jan 16, 2024

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• CosmicSlimeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Although this story is really grim in the first few chapters, the characters help bring out a bit of nuance in their dreary world. The world building in the first few chapters was also pretty solid, it wasn't too overbearing and was easy to follow. Nick and Bella are two pretty interesting characters, despite ther similar situation, they seem to be going about it in two very different ways.
  The biggest problem with the story is the spacing, the lines are spaced too far apart and it makes this a lot less fun to read.
• HA-GreeneRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  This may come across blunt and I do apologize if I offer any hurt.
  Right out of the gate, the grammar issues start and they just don't let up. They persistently drag down the writing and make it a chore to sit down and try to grasp any enjoyment as each chapter progresses.
  The story has so much potential here, it is ironically like the mines hiding a lodestone
  that Nick eventually discovered.
  But just as he was beaten for blithely ignoring his circumstances and how those around him felt, the story is beaten down by poorly conducted plot threads. And that brings us into the characters.
  God, as it is, appears out of nowhere to threaten the nation when there should have been some reference to tithing earlier on. The scheming second queen successfully murders the king and unwittingly helps further God's goal, who continues to be antagonistic simply because he can be.
  Yet later on God is presented subtly and as a kind being for Nick.
  Bella's development is a sudden 180 and she understands how cruel the world around her is after seemingly being far too naive/innocent.
  Her out during the first legitimate brothel interaction(for which I am grateful you avoided assaulting her)  came too easily. A few moments of powder burning and she escapes, and more over still achieves her goal of setting the place ablaze.
  And then we reach Nick,
  who I believe to be the missing prince.
  Or Peanut, as the guards call him for some bizarre reasoning about him being tough. I feel that Nick is the strongest voice you have here, and he could be much stronger with a little foresight about his actions.
  Ultimately, you have a rich tale to tell. But you desperately need a beta reader to go back over the present chapters and help you refine and clean up not only the grammar but the pacing and development.
• CosmorosRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  This review might come across as critical, but it's intended as constructive analysis.
  Style: The narrative struggles to establish a consistent writing style. It's unclear whether it follows a multi-MC approach with each getting their own POV or if it's a third-person narration by the author. This ambiguity makes it challenging to grasp the intended storytelling approach, especially early on.
  Story: The story revolves around a revenge theme, evident in the initial two chapters. However, insufficient character development leaves me indifferent towards the main characters (MCs) and their motivations for seeking revenge. Their anger towards the world feels baseless and childish. While its possible to empathize with them given more exposition of their struggles, the story rapidly delves into the revenge plot without effectively showcasing the depth of the protagonists' backgrounds. A more immersive approach, demonstrating the severity of their circumstances rather than just narrating, could significantly enhance the story's impact.
  Grammar: The grammar must be improved. Author has a tendency to neglect proper paragraph structure and leaves grammatical errors here and there. This disrupts the story's flow at times, hampering reader immersion. While the English is functional, considered today's assistance tools, this is really poor level of English.
  Character: Characterization is lacking, and the two MCs come off as interchangeable due to the scarcity of information provided. More insights into their backgrounds and motivations would enhance reader engagement.
  TLRD: This particular genre is not one that I enjoy, so these are my thoughts on the story. The brief chapters, coupled with a slow release schedule, raise concerns if they story will ever reach completion. The writing style is somewhat rudimentary, and certain issues are poorly though through, possibly due to the author's unfamiliarity with the subject matter. Writing is extremely in quality and grammatically makin