The Isekai
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This is the story of a boy that suffered a lot in his other life, he got bullied at the highschool and his father always beat him up, cut him making him suffer, and one day he died because his father killed him.
After being killed he found himself reincarnated as a baby in another world with a special mission to do. Do you think that it can get any crazier than that? Wait and see.
Hello, this is the first novel that I have written. I hope you enjoy it. A friend recommended me to write this because he said that it was a good idea. Let me know how I am doing if you can. The story won't bore you.
The story is: Adventure, drama, fantasy LitRpg and romance.
Cover made by Harumy-kyun Deviantart.
Remmember this isn't real.
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- Completed
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- Merly23@
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- 2.7/ 5.0
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- jimmyclearRoyal Road★★★ 2.5Having a journal for a story is a very tricky manuever. You have to include emotion, only the nessesary jumps, and right amount of emotion before you can include love into the picture.
Now, some chapters/entries, they were okay. Others, jump from one end of the land to the next without the slightest hint of how vast your world is. The fights are like how you write in a journal, uneventful and you come out on top. Now the Demon King Vs Florium, lost a couple of limbs, followed by dispair, then a reset to 1 month prior to the unfolding of events, standard 2nd chance deals.
Now, I'll give you that this is your first, but now you know, 'writting a journal for your character, is a all-or-nothing deal.' - thorlongRoyal Road★★ 2.0It is easy to see where the story is heading, very pitched toward a common theme. How the story is written really gives something to desire from, better grammar. It gives an appeal that the author can speak and understand English but is not fluent in it. There are also problems with over-generalization which forces the reader to interoperate much of the story and makes everything feel very empty.
- SohraRoyal Road★ 0.5The title is lackluster at best, japanese is only good if you actually master the language first. Furthermore, unless the word is a title( i mean a character's or object's title) using two language is akward.
The description is worse. It's cliched as all hell and tells of a boring character, while hardship can help people relate to the character, a beaten child is a bit overkill for a character you don't know and usually is never handled well.
I'll go over the story itself and send you a commented version with exemple of better ways you could've said what you were trying to say.
This is however only the execution. Your idea is also flawed and in the end, this will be why people will not like your story. You should focus on reading both great work of litterature, don't listen to the those that tells you they are boring, there exist plenty of recent-ish work that are very interesting and even the older ones have fascinating context. You should also study every genre and learn what they mean and what rule they have, every genre has rules and only by mastering them can you learn to break them in an interesting way. I would recommend personnaly to study greek tragedy and theater in general. For more flawed characters with dark backstories, read some Noir and modern adventure, as you are reading, ask yourself, why do i like this character? this will help you make interesting character.