The Invisible String

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Description

(On Hiatus While I Practice Writing With A New Story)

This is a story ofconnections.

A story of a Writer and his pen and paper.

Follow the writer as he creates Syndesi, the personification of The Invisible String. See how they change the world around them through the relationships they make. And in doing so,change themselves.

PS. it's fantasy but there are no elves, no magic, no superpower.

just realistic people living their normal lives, facing struggles like every human being

but that alone doesn't sound interesting, does it?

How about a specialdimensionthat connects the lead characters?

(check outChapter 2 - The White Horizon)

Art Cover Credit: Asviloka

Post Timings: (unsure for now as I am rewriting the chapters to make it polished. Hopefully once per week on Fridays)

This would allow me to post something you can read every week without abandoning the story. It's ajourney, I know. But I'm ready to continue without stopping. Are you ready? If you are, then let's start reading!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Ariadne_Yarn

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 7
Views: 17,408

Chapters(28 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

S.N. KeirsteadRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The Invisible String is a very unique story. With the wa it's written, it almost feels like poetrys; chapters are very short and broken up into brief yet snappy lines.
The story starts of very cute, with daughters baking and spending time with their mother. But it soons go south. I won't spoil any more, but since the chapters are short, it definitely couldn't hurt to check out a few chapters and see if it fits your tastes (especially if your taste includes enjoying birthday cake).
ElitheHillRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
An ambitious little story that contains a heap of little stories woven together like a nice cloak. It's not a linear storyline and there are a few holes here and there with grammar and style but considering it's the author's first work I think it's really well done. I wish I could've written something as good as this on my first try (when I was stuck in a stone cell with a shitty tablet).
One tip I'd give the author is:
Just keep writing. You've got a talent, but for a lot of authors that talent can be wasted through second-guessing yourself or getting too hung up on reviews etc. Enjoy the writing journey and best of luck!
Capital StationRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have to say this is probably one of the most unique stories I've ever read. At first, I thought it was a meta-tale where the narrator would talk directly to the reader. Then it turned more into a regular story (that followed Syndesi and her sister Agape) but then it moved on to Ethan (and in first person).
Despite the many angles, the chapters are very short and easy to follow. One chapter we're baking cookies with the sisters, and the next we're in the hospital. I'm never confused when in the chapter, I'm just confused how all these chapters fit together to form one narrative whole.
I assume the author wants to highlight life and how minor things can bring people together (like the cookies) but the story hasn't quite reached it crescendo, so we'll have to wait and see. Overall, I think this story is more like poetry. If you like abstract word play and story telling, this is the tale for you. There are multiple characters, different angles to see things, and characters who are "growing up" before your eyes.
It's definitely a passion project. I can feel the love from the author, I just think it might not be for everyone. There aren't any dragons to slay here, let's just put it that way.
VMJaskierniaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
There seem to be two styles of chapters in this story and they vary wildly. First are the sort of 'dream' chapters that are very short, and are all about feeling, and emotion. They read like poetry. I happen to love them.
The other chapters are story chapters. And somehow the quality of writing sort of slips here. We get 'RP' elements like *knocks* or *distant whimpering* which are a bit jarring. They do seem to be phased out though and aren't as prominent in the latter chapters, so that's good.
The story is very fast paced. There's a lot the author is trying to show us, and it might be too much at a time, because we don't have time to sink into the story. It's a relatively common mistake for newer authors.
But even now as I keep reading, the latter chapters are getting better. We're getting more information, we're presented with a bit more background and grounding. I think the author mentioned this is her first story, and for that, it is a very good one. You can already see improvement.
I hope the author keeps writing, because you can see them getting better as they go. The story is being fleshed out, the characters are getting more time. And the 'poetry' sections are lovely right from the start.
TaxReligionRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
From the first chapter, you can tell that a lot of care was put into writing this story. Each word is carefully chosen and the narration has almost a poetic rhythm to it. The grammar is great, style is great. My problem with this is that there isn't much that is making me want to read on.
Maybe it's the function of the incredibly short chapters that are very disjointed, hardly featuring the same characters, or introducing a concept without letting it have an impact on the story that I just can't become invested in it. That sounds harsh now that I think about it, after all, I do think there is a lot of merit in being experimental with narrative, and although I wasn't able to connect with this piece, it doesn't mean it's not worthwhile. In the end, not much engaged with me. There was no character I could really get attached to or plotline that I could follow.
That said, I do believe the author has a great understanding of sentence structure and is gifted in writing style. My overall rating reflects that I can see this being someone else's cup of tea. Art doesn't need to be appreciated by everyone, in fact, I think it's much better if art is beloved by a few and ignored or even despised by most, than for the art to be met universally by a lukewarm reaction. Ariadne is really swinging for the fences here, and for that I commend him. If there was a uniqueness category, this story would score a 5/5.
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
These chapters are, like, so damn short. We're talking 500ish words I think. A bit less than the RR standard which could create some users being mildly annoyed. I didn't mind too much but some might. Some of the chapters are also quite... I think mad dreaming would work fine enough. Not entirely sure how to describe it, really. Very interesting at least.
Grammar is fine though it does need quite a few touch-ups. 4.5/5 Good enough for a casual read.
The God Of BoredomRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
From what I read so far, I think that the idea is great, the charactors and plot unique, and the grammar is fine as well.
The exectution, however, needs work.
The chapters are even shorter than my own, and I think that that's fine, but the crux of it is that each chapter seems to contain multiple scenes.
I feel that this story contains a lot of emotion, but the problem is that I, as the reader, don't feel any of it. This isn't caused by the story itself though, so I think that it could still be fixed. Overall, 9/10.
Rhea BringRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story, as others have mentioned, is unique. I have never read a story so devoted to characters without following a single individual for a long duration of time. We have an overall far-reaching plotline with no perceptible connection between the arcs; no rhyme nor reason as to POV changes. Yet, something that seems almost odd in the execution of this story—it somehow works perfectly for this style.
Overall, it's unique in a good way, written as if it were real life (think text messages or journal) as opposed to a fictional story. This took some time to get used to, but wasn't a detriment to my personal enjoyment.
~ Characters. The characters are as interesting and unique as the story itself. We see into the lives of many, but in short snapshots. Tbh, for such a short time period, I felt deeply connected. The author does well with how he showcases different lives, showing a wide range of emotions throughout all stages of life, each tailored to the individual.
~ Style. Flow and structure are nicely done. The chapters themselves are written in a way that is easy to connect with and understand. Yet, this is also where the story is somewhat jarring—mostly because of confusion as to who is who. The individual chapters flow decently well, but I was still somewhat jarred in between as I tried to figure out when, where, and who I was with. As a result, immersion suffered until I became more aware and used to this style. Some of this is personal preference.
~ Grammar. Actually, decent overall. It could use some polishing, as there are quite a few caps/yelling that jarred me from the experience, and a few grammar errors. Nothing too unsettling, but my brain sees these things like clockwork. It was a lot like reading life through a journal or text messages. Short, sweet, and to the point while showcasing the lives of the characters through little snippets of their days.
~ Story. This story deserves a shout out. It is beautiful. Throughout the broken pieces, we learn with t
slokRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall: It might bw a bit short, but I found myself enjoying the story and characters.
Grammar Score: Generally, I'm not really one to fuss about these things too much, but I think both a bit of polishing is needed, so I settled on a 4/5 score. There were some inconsistencies in the tense, and a few errors in grammar that I don't think were intentional.
Style Score: 4.5/5 as I found myself enjoying reading it, as well as a lot of the word choices and general atmosphere. The length of the chapters was a bit too short for my liking however.
I'd personally have preferred some of the scenes to play for a bit longer so we can feel their impact, but that's more of a personal preference than anything else and I still found myself enjoying the story in spite of that.
Story Score: It's certainly a unique story with some abstract concepts in it, mostly apparent in the earlier chapters. But I was intrigued by it, and I very much enjoyed reading the story of Syndesi and then later on Ethan. I found myself enjoying the more slice of life-y aspects of it thanI expected even if it's still very early in the plot. I removed a star for the sole reason that I feel it moves by too fast, but it's still very enjoyable.
Character Score: A solid 4.5/5 for me. I feel it's the highlight of the whole piece. I felt their joy and sadness through the piece and I removed the 0.5 for the sole reason that I feel it's a bit too soon in the story for me to form a definite judgement.
AngaramwritesRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Disclaimer: this was a review swap.
I agree with other reviews that this story is hard to describe as it is a story, yet not?
Style: The style is quite interesting and a tad confusing which seems entirely intentional due to the nature of the story itself.
Story: I got lost and kinda haven't found it yet. It is about Syndesi I think. MAking connections to people so the stories are kinda that.
Grammar: I don't have much to say about the grammar it was good and I couldn't see any problems.
Character: Also got a bit lost there and at this point, could not tell you how many heads I was inside off. Syndesi is a small girl, seven years old that acts a bit more mature than her age. Which is probably the whole connection string thingy.
In the end, this is very hard to review because I mainly read fantasy and sci-fi. This story is more an artpiece I think, a collection of events and an interpretation of a string that connects it all. It does need polishing in the aspect that seem to confuse not just me.
So if you are the kind of reader that likes to think mor outside of the box, this story might be up your alley.