The Immortal's Dice
Self-Published
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Description
William Mu never expected to receive the Immortal's Dice.It was considered a blessing and a curse. Those who received its power would traverse between two worlds.He would become another person. Live another life as Feng Bai. The Immortal's Dice would be with him, those on Earth bearing witness to his rise on Earth-4.What will happen?-----------------------------Story ended.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2016
- Author
- Writer Eternal
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 3
- Views
- 3,912
Chapters(4 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- AdvonKoultharRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0I'm making this review a bit after I read the chapters in hopes to get you to keep writing it. To keep your writing constant, try writing a chapter every week. Stories that are put out regularly have more appeal, and that long amount of time can help you build up some spare chapters for when you are less than inspired(or have finals).
Now for the review, note that I will read anything about 1.5 stars or higher, and 2.5 is my standard for recommending to other people. Good stuff is around 4.
Style: I mentioned style on one of the chapters. In general, the writing has good flow and is consistent in tone. There are occasions where it seems there are a series of paragraphs that will bounce back and forth between two topics. This still usually flows well, but can make the actual comprehension difficult. Dialogue is odd at times.
Story: You haven't gotten far into the story yet, but there is definitely something intriguing happening. If you have something planned out for the reason for the amnesia, or otherwise have a plot that involves it, it is very promising. I mark it only as 4 stars now, because there hasn't been much yet, and the prologue isn't particularly thrilling on it's own.
Grammar: The occasional misspell, weird tense or whatever, so it isn't 5 star.
Character: Like the story, we haven't seen much with the characters yet. I rate it a little lower, because while the premise of the story far outshines any characters we've seen so far. There haven't been any major conversations other than those that serve as exposition, so that also probably lowers the evaluation a little more.
Finish those finals, and get back to writing! If you keep working on it, I definitely expect this story to become a good piece.