The Immortal Dragon And Dragon Girl

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

Rokson

• Chapter - 35
  May 13, 2019
• Chapter - 34
  May 12, 2019
• Chapter - 33
  May 10, 2019
• Chapter - 32
  May 10, 2019
• Chapter - 31
  May 9, 2019
• Chapter - 30
  May 8, 2019
• Chapter - 29
  May 7, 2019
• Chapter - 28
  May 6, 2019
• Chapter - 27
  May 5, 2019
• Chapter - 26
  May 3, 2019
• Chapter - 25
  May 2, 2019
• Chapter - 24
  Apr 30, 2019
• Chapter - 23
  Apr 29, 2019
• Chapter - 22
  Apr 28, 2019
• Chapter - 21
  Apr 27, 2019
• Chapter - 20
  Apr 26, 2019
• Chapter - 19
  Apr 26, 2019
• Chapter - 18
  Apr 25, 2019
• Chapter - 17
  Apr 24, 2019
• Chapter - 16
  Apr 23, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(4)

• ZackenRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Such an endearing story! I know you say you’re not the best at writing but not everyone is good at spelling and that’s not really important to the story. It’s not that serious! And you seem like you’re having fun with this story so no need to apologize. :^) There are some things that could be corrected, such as inconsistencies with where you place a period or comma at the end of your sentences, and where you do not. I do love how you ignore a lot of rules of writing, I think it really fits your story and kind of makes it feel like a long poem instead. But again, just try to be more consistent with the style of the story so it is clear when the grammar etc is supposed to be wrong! I think the most noticable thing is the change in language and spelling depending on which character’s perspective you’re reading from. The girl is a light hearted and simple minded girl who seems to take life as she sees it, while the dragon is much more complex as a being and proud of what he is. I think you’re incredible at writing characters.
• AzzryRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Hello ^^
  I really like your story.
  Often cute and funny, with sometimes a few darker moments, i loved !
  What I liked most in this story is the "free" side of the mc, and its relationship with Mr Dragon ^^
  I laughed a lot
  I am happy to have read it, although it is not finished.
  Thank you for this trip.
• ZethuronRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Overall this is a fun story to read, through with many flaws that are almost all situated in the writing style and grammar used by the author.
  The story starts with the simple-minded and carefree MC meeting a intelligent but lazy dragon, a ton of shenegians ensue from their meeting with the girl being her pushy simple-minded self. The uneasy relationship between them develops in a weird way over the course of their adventure.
  Im of the opinion that it would greatly help the readablity of the story if the author did structure the sentences correctly, the current way makes it far harder to read it overall. Through this way of writing like poems has its own benefits for the story, even if its just so hard to read.
  Another thing different with the writing style is that the author very often, writes the same event from two different point of views in different chapters.
  The writing of this story could be improved a lot in just so many ways. For me the grammar in this story is not a that big problem, but i can see why some people can get turned off by the current quality of the grammar. Some small fixes would already help the writing quality. There are also those mistakes that are done on purpose, mainly in the girl chapters. Correct usage of puncuation would also help since its used seemingly random currently.
  This story is certainly not for everyone, with the major flaws it currently has, notably grammar being the biggest problem, but also the differing writing styles used in the story for the different POV's. But if you can manage to get past that, you will most likely like this crazy and cute adventure.
• TomaRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  Was not too sure if I even wanted to review this but considering how good the cover art is, I want to help you out.
  The grammar is atrocious. Really nothing you do with the story will make people read it if the writing is at this level. Not even talking about your unbearably simplistic writing, your use of periods and commas seems to change constantly. You do not put exclamation marks when a character shouts(sometimes) and the way every line is separated is completely nonsensical. It ruins anything that could be salvaged if we ignore all the previous points. Your "I's" are in lower case, by the way.
  I am not going to comment on your story, world or characters because honestly, you can do whatever you want with those.
  But I do wonder why you even bothered writing this with a gaming system when you seem to completely forget it, would have been better to keep this as simple fantasy when the system doesn't add anything.
  Like I wrote in the beginning, your cover is good. That gets a full extra star from me, your sister's drawings are great.
  Despite my harsh criticism I hope you keep writing and, hopefully, improving. Good luck.