Drunk and in high spirits, Remy is told by his party that they want to split. Angry at them, Remy beats all of them up. Now in debt for destroying his favorite bar and on the cusp of losing his titles and ranks, Remy must deal with the fallout.

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★★★★★ 4.5

Okay, the writing is more than a bit clunky, but I was still grinning the whole way through.
Remy is definitely a total douche, but his life is suitably miserable to compensate (a mixture of self inflicted torment and tragedy). Still, he isn't exactly malicious, just very childish. The story could take him a lot of different ways. I assume he is (or was) meant to get into increasingly ridiculous situations, but actually reading this, I kind of like the idea of him being slowly transformed into a genuinely cool dude (with no patience for stupid shit). The story would have to get a bit more serious to pull it off, but I don't think that would be a bad thing at all.
The other characters are a bit cliche/underdeveloped, but I actually like the direction Edge is developing. He's also a total douche, but the story suggests he may very well be a shitty isekai protag in disguise. He makes a decent foil for Remy, and, if the story decided to get a little serious, we could see him develop into a proper villain. Not like, a big climactic world threat, but more like a villain in Remy's character arc. Something like that. I sense great potential in their interaction, with Remy being honest but rude, while Edge can put on a good show, but is a total creep.
Asides from Edge, there are some other interesting characters in familiar archetypes, but everyone is just a bit rough around the edges. It's a pleasant effect, imo, though tastes may differ.
As for the plot, there doesn't appear to be a main hook, and if one appears I expect it to come out of nowhere. There's enough happening so far for a story to happen, though I wonder what the intended length for this is.
Anyway, my thoughts for the author. In spite of how rough the writing is, I quite liked it. You definitely need to work on your prose, but it's not garbage, just so very clunky. I assume you either aren't a native English speaker, or else simply aren't very well read. In any case, I think more reading is in

The Hero was Kicked Out of his Own Party

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