The Herald of Light

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

Skymak

• Chapter 8: Ambush
  Nov 2, 2023
• Chapter 7: Practical Practice
  Nov 1, 2023
• Chapter 6: Blades & Battle
  Oct 31, 2023
• Chapter 5: Mordecai
  Oct 30, 2023
• Chapter 4: The Mindscape
  Oct 29, 2023
• Chapter 3: Answers
  Oct 28, 2023
• Chapter 2: Moonlit Chase
  Oct 27, 2023
• Chapter 1: Divine Decree
  Oct 26, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• ItsssKarimiRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Think it's realy good so far. i love stories with an op main character so im hoping the boy will get more powerful, like mark of the crijik maybe? spelling stuff is actually very good and i'm hoping that the world gets history and maybe even a map (ooh) Can you please make the text a bit smaller though?
  It is for sure giving mark of the crijik vibes and im all here for it. Just praying that there's regular uploads, fingers crossed. the author for mother of lerning took way too long with their uploads, so im wanting at least one big chapter a week., Also hit me up if you do want a map made. I have a friend who does them really well for some prominant writers on royal road.
  Now Im gonna type random words because i dont have anything else to fill this review. They need way too many words
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• GenesisLotusImmortalRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I like the concept a lot and the grammar is good. Maybe just flush out the characters and their dialogue a bit more and upload regularly.
  I'd also like to learn a bit more about this priest. He seems nice but also might have an ulterior motive, the author has definitely left room to work with here.
• Odessa SilverRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  I'm aware this is your first story and so I'm taking that into consideration. I'm going to go into as much detail as I can, not to put you off, but to highlight and help you get better.
  First of all, I can tell you are enjoying writing this. And that's very important. Having the joy is one of the most important things about writing as the technical stuff can be learnt later easily enough. I can also tell you are improving each chapter, which is great because you are learning from what you have written before.
  I can tell this is your first story, and that's not a bad thing because we all start somewhere, and I think you still have a way to go. However what you do have is a great start and I think if you continue like this you'll just get better and better.
  To explain my scores further;
  Style - I don't think you have yet found your author voice (it takes a while) but I was able to keep reading and your paragraphs were fine. There was no odd sentence structures or anything that made me want to stop.
  Story - To make your story better, you need to slow down a little. Atm we jump from A to B to C so quick and it's hard to keep up. Slowing down gives you ample time to give us many details which are missing. These details will also help flesh out the characters and the world around them. Right now, I don't really know what some of the locations are like. What do your characters, see or smell, what is the weather and light like, what is the season... Immerse the reader with the details, make them feel what your character feels. A lot of the big things, such as the divine stuff was also info dumped and could really do with being explained better.
  Something else to look into, which EVERY writer does at some point, is show not tell :) you will also learn how to move away from that as you keep writing too.
  Another point is you have sections in first person and sections in third person. Shifts like this can feel awkward and sometimes it's better to stay in one or the other. This