The Hardships of a Demonic Monarchy

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Alexander wanted to live a normal life. Well, the normal life of a world traveler. He did not know that he would meet an early demise chasing that desire. He is reborn into a fantasy world, the only child of a high ranking noble at that. To make matters more... interesting, he is part of a dying race of demons. Will Alexander get the life he always wanted or will his surroundings rob him of his second chance?

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: BlueYoder

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.1/ 5.0
Followers: 533
Views: 325,844

Chapters(50 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

LittlemansRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Love it. great story and unique
WodanazRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I just couldn't help finding myself loving this story! Though there are admittedly a few spelling or grammatical mistakes, they in no way impede or distract one in any real meaningful way. I also thoroughly enjoyed those snippets at the ends of the chapters. Overall, the story is interesting and continues to draw me in. And I look forward to more! Really... Please?
BlueYoderRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is my first book, It does have influences of other books, however, it is my original. Comments greatly appreciated. I will try to keep updates as frequent as possible but no promises. If you guys, the readers, feel like the story should go as certain route, I'll try to implement it if enough people agree. I know it is not a perfect story. Yes, I know the chapter's are short. Yes, I know it's a little fast paste. Thing is, I write these at night, so it is a little influenced by the urge to move the story a long.
On another note, I like to draw the maps, the characters and such, if you want to see them I may sneak them into chapters if given directions how to do so.
I can't wait to read your reviews and comments.
Post Script: I am also working another book that I'll post sometime in the future as well, this may hinder this books chapter update speed by a bit. I apologize for future inconveniences.
TTT144Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
When looking for a story to read I always read the reviews it has, it doesn't massively influence my decision, they are only their opinion not mine. Dispite mediocre reviews I liked the concept so read it.
Style:
Initially the authors writing style is understandably not great, sometimes making me feel something was skipped or left out. However as the story progresses it clearly improves a lot!
Story:
I like the story the only things I think it needs, slower pace and fleshing out a bit!
Grammer:
Grammer is ok, quite a few mistakes but they don't make it hard to read.
Character:
I like them but again need fleshing out and more development.
Not bad overall I like it.
Thanks for the story
lynnqRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
thanks for another great story to read and im waiting new chapter to read. please make it long chapter to read.
KadarkRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This review was done after reading Chapter 6.
One of the most frequent problem I've seen in stories on this site are related to internal inconsistencies.
When you do your world building and plan out your story, you should often ask yourself if it make sense.
There are two points (spoilers) that I can point out:
- 18 years old, still level one and without skills. He's one of the last member of a noble demon race and his family didn't cultivate him at all?
- No family interactions are shown, at all. They never talk and he just go adventuring with no worries. MC could have been an orphan with a huge amount of cash and it would've made no difference. Hell, the heir of the duchy don't even have bodyguards and could've died randomly to any weakling walking around.
These unexplained holes are huge and really prevent from enjoying your work properly.
SobekRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I started reading this book feeling as though the meme concentration might be slightly over nine thousand. However my expectations were shattered as jesus and his wife keemstar came to me in a dream and showed me how many plot holes are in this story, and how stupid alot of these characters are.
For example no gaurds for the last heir of a dying race. Does one leave the last box of twinkies in the world unguarded? No? well why not protect the future for ur whole fookin race.
All in all i give this 2.5 Doritos/ 5
saikaRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I stopped reading halfway through chapter 22 cause I could not take it anymore. I will be spoiling up till this point so you are warned.
Starting from the beginning, you should have not skipped the MC’s entire childhood. The point of the childhood arc is to introduce the world, learn about the MC’s surroundings, parents, siblings, religion, power rankings, and other things. By skipping this I felt no connection to this world. Yes the childhood arc can be a tedious/boring/info dump/repetitive area but that is where we (the readers) learn about the world. Hell the MC gets massive laws to be passed during this time period, and we only learn about it through conversations.
The end of chapter 1 completely glosses over the fact that HE IS THE LAST OF HIS ENTIRE RACE. Doesn’t say how they died (till later chapters) and as of that chapter you only think that him and his parents are the last of his entire race (you find out that he has an uncle, and eventually another until chapter 22). THIS MAKES NO SENSE, he is the last member of a dying race and his parents just let him go off on his own? No protection/supervision/guards nothing at all. I would understand if he was being shadowed by someone and the MC never knows about it but not even this happens.
Next is when his mother and uncle are both now dying from eggs? I felt nothing towards either of them, hell I didn’t even know that he had an uncle until that point. At this point in time you finally learn about how there are now 4 (about to become 2) members of an entire race. They were all killed during the last war. THIS MAKES NO SENSE. EVERY SINGLE MEMBER (expect for the mom as it seems she was to young) were in this war? So there were no other people that were to young, or to old, other people who are not ”strong enough to enter the void” (both his parents are not strong enough but his father was somehow able to join the army) which brings me to another point, are the MC’s parents just trash members or is it more common t
wohlzyRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
this story held a lot of potential but sadly i can't enjoy the ride while reading.
I stoped reading after a few chapter because of 'some' things bugging me.
1. THE BACKGROUND !!!!! , you explain the background story in one chapter and pof the mc is 18 and leave home, we know nothing about his family and very little about the world, you skipped the whole childhood part and it feel like instead of being reincarnated he just got transported to the world (We don't know the family, no friend etc...). It create a huge lack of informations about almost everything.
2. The most spoiled kid then the most hated : like said by other people he leave home alone even if he is part of a noble dying race, he leave at 18 with the basic stats of a begginer in my imagination i imagine hime staying in bed listening to story from his parents all the time he was home, doing nothing, not even a little training to help him survive. then i imagine his parent telling him " ok son, you can go explore the 'fuckin dangerous' world take care, bye"
anyway just these 2 points made me drop the story so early because i don't feel anything about the mc, we know nothing about him and his story on the new world except that (in my opinion) he is a retard that did nothing for 18 years and then got an enlightement (and he even say in chapter 1 that he consider himself a bright man) that he will train his body to travel.
HurrahhhRoyal Road
★ 0.5
First I though it would be fun to read but I was so wrong a plain shitty 14yo fantasm harem.