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At the end of an universe full of might hungry Gods there exists a world; A world ruled by three different races, three races so different in appearances, life styles and convictions that conflicts between the three races seem unavoidable.

In this world a boy is born. A boy with a mission; The mission to change the order of his world...

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Redeyes EclipseRoyal Road

★★★★★ 5.0

this story is one of the best i ever read please do come back and finish it.

m45halo45mRoyal Road

★★★★ 4.0

style- the story is easy to read and feels fluent my only complaint is that sometimes its confusing to read the conversations because you only seperate then with a '-' but its still understandable and is not so common in the story
grammar- i have pointed out the most prominent mistakes you dont need a proof reader/editor just go over the chapters again before you post them. the grammar is not bad in rrl standarts and a lot of the mistakes are typos and bearly noticeble so it doesnt hurt the reading experience
story- the story is still begining at the time of this review so i cant say a lot about it but seems intresting so far will update later if i remember
characters- well here we have some problems still not so big but problems nonetheless.
lets start with the characters desriptions- i have no idea how anyone of the characters looks like exept Abigail's hair color and the goddess big breasts. you should tell us more about how everyone looks like. if you want to leave it to our imagination thats fine but give us some guidlines for all i know the protagonist could have seven eyes tree tails and be bald. now that might be an interesting look but is that what you wanted him to be?
another thing is the zoo part. in there Laura sees Ernesti as her savior for helping her cross the fence but she does not acknowledge Tristan actions at all and fighting some huge beast is a lot more than climbing a fence. now she is a kid and might only see the one who is in front of her as her savior but in later chapters you already showed she acts a lot more mature and she is smarter than kids in her age should be and it feels like they act as children only when you need them to act that way
*spoilers*
the other part i have with the characters is their behavior. first of all Laura is pictured at the begining as a kid who is only intrested in bugs and she acts like a little girl should but when they go to the school all traces of this Laura is gone she becomes a lot more mature and then

The Grey Line Between Light and Shadows

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