The GOD Eating Dungeon
Self-Published
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Description
This novel is about a guy that is turn into a dungeon and a lot of world that has been mash up together how will he survive and kill the god that want him to kill himself......How did he die and what is the Breakdown find out more in my story.{Thank you for reading}P.S. : Hay fellow reader the main reason i write this novel is to improve my English writing skill while i am not the best i hope you all can give me some idea and criticism, oh but don't give me too much idea my head might get blow up with idea overload btw pleas tell me what tag to put i have no idea.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- ArcaneMaster
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 2.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 50
- Views
- 21,709
Chapters(10 total)
- Going to rest for a while sry for taking your timeDec 19, 2015
- Chapter 6 : Welcoming the enemyDec 19, 2015
- Chapter 5 : Body of the Master ThiefDec 18, 2015
- Chapter 4 : The Golem in Oak ForrestDec 17, 2015
- Chapter 3 : Journey Toward RevengeDec 16, 2015
- Chapter 2 : The Lurking DarknessDec 16, 2015
- Chapter 1 : My body and choiseDec 15, 2015
- prologue 3:How i dieDec 14, 2015
- prologue 2: The Break DownDec 13, 2015
- prologue: Conversation with GODDec 13, 2015
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Community Reviews(1)
- sa1880612mRoyal Road★★★ 2.5Rewrite your synopsis. There are a lot of errors and right now it is less a synopsis and more an introduction to you and the general type of work this story is. This may be a cultural difference, but it doesn’t work as well with an english (North American at least) audience. The synopsis should include the general type of the story but shouldn’t outright say that is what it is doing. It should introduce the main character, give the readers an idea of what sort of story they are going to be reading, and make them want to read more, all while not making the prologue irrelevant.
As to the rest of the story I sort of glanced at it and one thing stands out very clearly. That would be your dialogue and dialogue tagging. “” – Person is bad English, and it’s a habit you should get out of as quickly as possible. Use said, responded, describe the action they are taking as the character speaks. If you are worried about making sure people know who is talking, RRL let’s you change the color of the text and you can alternate it for each speaker. Even that would be better than perpetuating a bad habit. Not using colors would be best but if you feel you need to.
Also pick a font and stick with it. If you change it change it for all your chapters. This is more my personal pet peeve but I imagine I’m not the only one annoyed by it.
On a more positive note, I feel like the idea of a bunch of worlds getting mashed together could be very interesting.
You can ignore the rating on this, it’s irrelevant. I just need to set one to give some feedback.