The First Primordial [DROPPED]

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[Story dropped until further notice and is being kept as a reminder of where I started. I don't currently plan on restarting the story but will leave it as a possible future option]

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  • UnderloadRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    The book is only firce chapters in, so there isn't much of a story to write review upon.  Still, there are a few things I can say,
    1. The character voice: it's calm and meticulous, making the chapters easy to read.
    2. Story pace: I personally think the mc should have fallen into a village to rule. The hole is too dark and quiet for a story about primodials.
    3. Grammer: Though there are missing commas, i belive it's better to have running g sentences than to have sentences chocked dead by commas. The grammar is fine. I understood everything that was said.
    P.s: I hope this turtle starts running as soon as possible.