The First Archmage

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Description

This story is only posted to here (RoyalRoad) by me, the author. Anywhere else it has been posted is not authorized by me. It is and will remain free to read.

Since it's had some attention now, I'm going to put in some quick heads-ups for everyone coming in:

1) This story was completed years ago and is my worst-written story. I have zero plans to come back and edit it because of how long ago it was completed and my desire to move on from it.

2) I did not put much care into the writing of this story. That said, Gavin is a kid with some issues early on and it takes awhile for him to start to mature. If you're not interested in waiting on that sort of thing, you're warned.

3) There is zero romance/sex for Gavin in it, but his main party companionsaregay, so if that's a turnoff for you, you're warned.

Not everyone has access to the System - in fact, very, very few become Adventurers. No one knows how the System selects new Adventurers, or why. The System enables people to level up, to gain skills and stats far stronger and much faster than those without access to the System. While magic does exists, no one has ever had the option of a magic class.

Until now - Gavin, an orphan in a small village, is watching a group of Adventurers passing through speak with the village Elders when he suddenly gains access to the System, and one of the Classes he can take on initially, based on his stats and skillbase from before he gained access, is "Wizard".

In a world where Adventurers must swear fealty to their kings or be branded as traitors, can Gavin - a mere boy - keep his secret long enough to become a force none can abuse? Or will his secret be known, and his advanced magical abilities used for a cause he doesn't support?

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2017
Author: KurtMKing

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 1,844
Views: 1,691,730

Chapters(125 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

LamoganRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is one of my favorite of all time so far on this site. The story and the ending is so good that it really is amazing.
Kat KingsleyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Don't let the haters get you down. Keep on keepin' on. Write what you want, no matter what the drive-by's say.
Your fictions are all well done. You have a great pattern and a great style.
SongSystemRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is one of my favorites on RR, and I'm so thankful that you wrote it and brought it into the world. Thank you so much for your hard word <3
-Hayden
TekknosRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
love the main person. only thing i dont like so far is the chapters are a little short (but 10k words is short for me ) and not enough chapters. ( so write faster )
CasimirRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Edit: 5/27/18
After the time of my original review, The author has written more chapters and attempted to fill in some of the gaps in his story, and seems pretty dedicated to improving his work. I haven't caught up with this story, but I recommend giving it a chance and decide for yourself, at least further than ch. 32.
Also, you still need a better cover than solid purple Mr. King.
Old review: 1/18/18
There will be spoilers in this review up to chapter 32, be warned.
The story had a good beginning, but becomes a bit of a mess latter on. The plot is a bit inconsistant, with plot holes in the story, notably reguarding how the King died early on, never using his class powers to keep his subjects in line, was a bit confusing for me.
The Protagonist also never feels like he's taking charge, is talked down to constantly by people he just started associating with, and is quote unqoute "Grounded" to a Inn room for a week by one of his associates. That and the fact the character never seems to be able to use the Intelligence he's accuring via the system in this story to plan out his actions a bit more smartly, came accross to me and other readers as a bit of a dumb moment.
Gavin meeting his family for the first time came off as weird and unnatural to me, and (future spoilers here) his father being revealed as a major Antagonist wasn't forshadowed well, and felt like it came out of left field. Perhaps if he had tried to recruit Gavin to his Master plan, or the rift Guardians explained to Gavin what his father was planning, would've set up that plot point better.
And, on a personal note, I like to know if the Protagonist of the story is going to be Straight/Gay/Bi before reading deeper, I hadn't know before this that the Author perfers to write about Gay oriented characters. I don't usually pick up books with Gay protagonists, as to invest myself in a story I try to self-identify with them as much as possible, and that isn't possible with Gavin for me.
Reading this for the fi
apricotsodaRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
A little bit of problem with writing style but the story is good.
A minor complications about the side characters sexuality and their pov's that makes me uncomfortable leading to a decision that I should stop reading it, too bad as I like to see how OP Gavin will become.
Waffle(est)Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
It started off great but has reached a point where the mc doubles in power every other chapter and can basically do whatever he wants without consequence. Any tension there is for the briefest of moments is thin and fake.
The MCs status (table) is bloated to the point that almost all of it is meaningless except as a thin excuse to explain how the mc is so unexplainably op.
There's also a lot of showing off on the MCs part and fake diplomacy/negotiations when at the end of the day he basically strongarms the opposition anyway.
BadGenuisRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The pacing is like a slide show. It goes from one act to another. I didn't even get the clear picture of the plot.
The system is not well thought. Skills just come and go, system is in ambiguous state of being sentient or not, classes don't adjust to social strata.
And I don't like the MCs character.
SemexyRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Now I know that a writing style is totally the writers own choice. But I have just one point which may make it better and increase the quality of your story's. I read a shit ton of books across a lot of genres and this makes it so that it's easier to see some faults in writing sometimes.
In your story when you are telling certain scenes with multiple characters with only a few talking it feels as if the others aren't there. Simply because the other characters don't say anything it feels as if they don't exist for the reader.
This can cause some misconceptions for the readers. When Gavin reunited with his biological family his mom didn't say shit. If a character doesn't say anything (or anyone else says something about the character) then it is also impossible for the reader to deduce that characters state of mind. As such the character will simply seem dismissive or uncaring.
Don't get me wrong. Besides this one thing which kinda irritates me I really like your take on a system and your story's world.
matthewrbirdRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I normally don't stop reading a series but I just got fed up with the main charachter... couldn't empathize with him any more. The repeated poor decisions and attitude were annoying.