The Fate of a villain (But not really)

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Description

And in all fairness, he's a walking, talking red flag. With neither the talent for magic, nor the constitution for swords, he opted for the one weapon he knew by heart. A gun, gifted to him by his (now) ex-girlfriend. Taking over the body of a dying boy, he lives out his days, slowing working towards the ultimate end that either sees himself dead, or the rest of the world exterminated. But for now, he has time to kill.

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NOTE: CONTAINS CROSSDRESSING, LGBT ELEMENTS

It starts off really slowly, so take your time

Word counts per chapter part from 1000-1500

Releases twice weekly(?)

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2020
Author: cielthree

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.1/ 5.0
Followers: 53
Views: 74,037

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Community Reviews(3)

DrakoRemRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Before we start, I want to say that this review is subjective and before judging the book, give it a try, I'll try to be constructive and give you some suggestions that, I hope, will help you.
Style: let's start here, it's well written and it's easy to follow, it's what you would call a light novel, through and through. The descriptions are good and the writing style is okay, why I've removed half star? Well, because the author has the habit to break a sentence that was perfectly fine and make it weird to read, here's an example: "They had a suit looking outfit, with black over white. They all had the same outfit, the blue mantle and a steel plate covered the right shoulder." I'd suggest making this kind of sentence into one more structured sentence, like: "They all had the same outfit, a suit looking outfit, black over white with the blue mantle and a steel plate covered the right shoulder."
Grammar: Generally speaking, it is well written, but unfortunately many small mistakes could sour the experience. There are many missing words and unfinished sentences, for example: "Very then, my lord." or "Do you want to guide you there." There are quite a few missed words, I'd suggest you get an editor or a proofreader, you don't need professionals, you can just ask some friends or readers to do it.
Story: Be prepared, it's a slow-pace narration, where a whole chapter could go with just a few scenes and very little information provided, probable 10 years ago when I was wet behind ears, I would like this story more, but now, well I look at things differently, first and the biggest issue for me is that there's no hook! Nothing makes me excited about continuing reading, we don't know where the story goes to, we don't have any hidden plots, twists, or cliffhangers, things just happen and each chapter just describes an event, that's it. I'd suggest you maybe rewrite the first few chapters a bit, reintroduce the feeling of urgency, it'll add more dynamic to the story.
Character: T
majorsilver99Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I am definitely having fun reading this and I find the writing style easy to digest. The changes in perspective can be slightly confusing, but since it is written in third person it is easy to catch on.
This is my first review so I probably don't know what I am doing but I hope someone finds this helpful.
TheNameOfTheWindRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I was very conflicted whether I should write a review or not. Espesially when it is the first review. But here I am, so sorry in advance, because I suck at sugar-coating.
Let's start with the story, because that is what people primarily come looking for when they start reading a novel. The story starts with the whole: "waking up in another body" -thing, which is very well-written. We "the readers" learn that the Main Character (MC) was a normal dude from our world, and now is in a body of a bad-mannered, presumptuous son of a duke.
While this is the start of the story, it does not really tell the reader with certainty what the story is gonna be about, but I as a reader, thought the story was gonna be about how he escape the whole "villian" -role, but I was sorely mistaken.
So what is the story about? I still don't know.. It was only the servants and knights that hated him, and that's that. Why the knights hate him, when he has never interacted with them is never really explained, the best explanation is that they all hate his father and family which ofcourse includes him, but that raises the question: "why would anybody swear loyalty to somebody they hate?" I mean, if the MC family was a small poor baron, then it would make sense that less-talented people would aply for a job at the only place it is posible for them, even if they hate their employer, and the poor baron wouldn't have the money to only take the best and most loyal. But that is very much not the case here.
Since I have no ideér regarding what the plot or story is about, I can't really review it, so right in the middle 2,5.
Characters
Characters are what shape the story, and in my eyes at least, the most important part of a novel.
As I said before, the story start with MC being just a normal dude in a son of a dukes body, which is were we "all the readers" (again) was sorely mistaken. The MC is apparently not just a dude, or a brutich bullly, he is almost the opposite, he is very feminine and weak trap.