The Fate Eater

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Description

What might a man really do if he found himself reincarnated into a fantasy world as a dragon prince?

How would he come to terms with his new nature, his larger-than-life family, the agendas of warring factions, and the destiny he never asked for?

This is a story that intends to defy some isekai tropes, but play into others. It's mainly about exploring a rich hand-crafted world, full of its own history and mysteries. Its characters have their own lives and aspirations, and our protagonist is but a piece of the greater tapestry.

This story is not about right and wrong, or good and evil. It's about a dragon-man being tested by fate, power, and time. It's about what it's like to live as an outsider who lost their home.

But perhaps the most central theme is freedom.

What does freedom really mean? What will it cost and how much might one be willing to pay for it? Does it even truly exist?

Let's find out together.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Amartho

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 42
Views: 12,914

Chapters(12 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

PrometheanRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Early review, but one I feel needs to be made.
First off, The Prologue was Awesome. The Prose didn't feel forced and you got a real Feel for what it was like to be in the body of a dragon. The backstory for the main character was succinct and well executed enough that you could get a sense of who the character is without feeling like you got smacked by a runaway info-dump.
Everything is great. It feels like the prelude to a grand adventure.
Then problems start in chapter 1 the moment characters open their mouths.
The dialog is bad, Very Bad, in the opening chapters. It's so out of place that I had to check to make sure I hadn't tabbed out into a different story. The characters don't so much "Talk" as "Info Dump" at each other. I can't stress this enough, If a normal conversation is two people having a water gun fight then the dialog here is two people taking fire hoses loaded with unfiltered exposition and mowing down everything in their path. There aren't any breaks where there naturally should be.
They also don't really Emote or characterize themselves naturally in their dialog. It's like reading a texbook describing some historical event rather than as story with people in it.
I don't mean to be rude and props to the author, you definitely have your imagery and enviromentals down to an amazing level. That's Really hard to get right, but the dialog is so out of sink with the rest of the story that it becomes even Worse in comparison. Like a short, skinny teen with acne surrounded by tall, handsome football athletes.
Hopefully it gets better later and this is just the early steps in learning the writing process, but if so, please, Please go back and rewrite the early chapters. They are Going to scare away new readers.