The Eyes See All

Self-Published

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Description

Body-counts mean nothing to Known, Nocks, Shine, Dough, and Moan. They live and breathe violence. As agents of the Kalapu, everything they do is illegal and illicit.

Unbeknownst to them, the eyes of their victims are watching. Waiting for the group to get their comeuppance, the eyes see all. When one of them receives ill-omens, the thing they've inadvertently summoned reveals itself.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Sii

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.5/ 5.0
Followers: 5
Views: 3,041

Chapters(10 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

incarnadineRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Fast-paced story that I genuinely am looking forward to update.
warning: I'm fairly new at reviewing, and as of this review, I've read until Chapter 9 (for the record).
In the first chapter, we're introduced to distinguishable characters - a gang, full of members Nocks, Dough, Moan, and, at the end,
a new member named 'Moan.'
The big thing about this story is that we never forget that they're members of a gang. They do illegal things, they never stop doing illegal things, and even though they do, at times, feel guilty about killing things, we're faced with another reminder that yes, they are villains.
For the realistic characters, setting, and really everything in general, an overall solid 4. Adding to my personal preference of said realistic characters and setting, I'd add a 0.5 points.
Style Score: 4.5/5
I like the prose. Correction: I like it a whole lot. How the author manages to move forward the plot at (almost) breakneck speed, while tantalizingly hovering the threat of the eyes and maintaining the sense of mystery about the Kalupu genuinely piques my interest, so extremely well-done on that part.
The only reason why I'd take a half-point off is because, although the style fits both the story and the setting, a 5/5 would mean perfection, and the style edges it, but it's not quite there (my personal thoughts, since I do prefer honesty).
Story Score: 4.5/5
The plot flies. In which other stories would take the beginning, stuff it full of exposition, and give to us in the form of the setting, we are moved steadily but surely through many incidents,
Like the club scene where an antagonist is introduced.
I’ve said that it moves at (almost) breakneck speed, but it works. For me, it feels like I’m flying on a safe bullet train - it’s revealed that there’s something messing with them behind the scenes, here.
The blue eyes watching Nocks, the yellow watching Known, the green with Shine, the purple with Moan, and the red with Dough. A lot of memories appear here - the ti