The Enigmas: First Crusades

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

bnfoster19

• Madmen rise
  Jun 17, 2020
• The figures inside
  May 30, 2020
• Insanity
  May 28, 2020
• A mad man is coming
  May 27, 2020
• To Know Sorrow
  Aug 7, 2019
• What the Dust Revals
  May 12, 2019
• When the World Crumbles
  Apr 14, 2019
• Beginning of The End
  Apr 12, 2019
• Meeting the Water Man/Nano
  Apr 9, 2019
• A New Fight
  Apr 9, 2019
• Meeting Toria and Fetcher
  Apr 7, 2019
• A Battle on Two Fronts
  Apr 7, 2019
• The Voices from Above
  Apr 5, 2019
• Philosophy
  Apr 5, 2019
• Battle At The Parkington
  Apr 4, 2019
• Meeting The Hacker
  Apr 3, 2019
• The Realization
  Apr 3, 2019
• The Phantoms: The Beginning
  Apr 2, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• Bojangles the dancer of woeRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Their is a lot of spelling mistakes and parts seemed rushed but I am judging it solely on how it made me feel and it really had a very deep and intresting story that could be developed into something good if writer comes out of hiatus. The way it just brings to mind pychological concepts right at you is intresting. I also like how it really seems to be coming from the view point of men and women mad in their own ways. I just can't get over the way one of the protagonist could just let all the horror happen and still focus on their goal. I really feel like if touched up it could be really good in the long run because it just seems like the characters are being set up in a way that is different from regular superheros but also not politicized like in the boys There is something engimatic about the way the characters are function.
• darksenRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  Hello, Bnfoster19!
  So, a bit of backstory before I get into 'why I rated it one star'. I saw your post about wanting for a cover art for this fiction and I decided to check out this story just because I was genuinely a bit curious as to what this story was about. I guess you could say that it was being very.. enigmatic. Haha, good pun right? Get it? Cause your story is called the Enigmas and-
  Let's just get to the review.
  Sorry, it's not good. At least I'm referring to the style and the grammar. I tried to read the first chapter but I could not bring myself to finish it. There were many run-on sentences (and also misspelling, though I don't really mind these). The run-on sentences makes the story hard to understand and there were some sentences that I find to be not understandable at all. And I'm just talking about the beginning part of Chapter 1, which refers to until the point where there's a change in the scene that came out of nowhere and the story suddenly introduces Mr. Fetcher.
  The way the story introduced these characters were also very reliant on 'telling' rather than 'showing', which is not an inherently bad thing but the way it is done in this particular context is bad.
  Which brings me to my last point, the beginning of the story is practically just an infodump. And many others in the first chapter are too. The story uses inside references that the readers would not have known in the first place so I would say that this was a bit jarring.
  And I am not bashing on the way of this story is written, but it seems to me that you like to write on a chapter-to-chapter basis where you write one chapter and then publish and then you write one chapter again. My suggestion is to avoid this. I understand the feeling of wanting to get something published immediately and it is a very nice feeling - based on my own experience. But, if you really want publish the whole thing, I believe that at least planning the entire story first is necessary. I will give the writer the