The Elementals

Self-Published

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Description

Tarah and several other Elementals are fleeing the Government. Having Elementals that are each others weakness it can be hard for some of them to get a long, but in order to defeat the Gorvernment they need to over come their weakness and work together. Will they ever overcome their weakness? Will there ever be peace for the Elementals? Or will their cause end in vain? Read this book to find out.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Sarah

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Rating: 2.0/ 5.0
Views: 101

Chapters(16 total)

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Vampire 47Royal Road
★★ 2.0
I like the concept idea but there is nowhere near enough description. It feels very abrupt and forced. All the characters conveniently meet in a forest and all decide in a paragraph that they are all totally cool with each other after they just tried to kill each other? You should to try to describe more about what the characters do and how they interact with each other, maybe kept it as just hte first two for a while. Alternatively you could start it with them all knoing each other and then slowly reveal who they are.
Above all tough the style of writing the is the problem, there is not enough other punctuation to break up your thoughts when reading. It makes it awkward and not particualarly enjoyable.
However the grammar is fine and tehre are no major problems. Not an issue
I gave two stars because while the concept is something really neat, teh wrtiting style is just too awkward. Try reading it out in your head and see if you can tell what I mean. Hwoever i would encourage you to continue the story and try to improve your writing style. If you did I woud definetely give it another shot. However for now the writing style and lack of description means that i shan't be continuing.
Good Luck!