The Dungeon Pact

Self-Published

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Description

They must live, and so, a god must die.

Luneil, a unique dungeon, awakens in the wilderness. He must learn to adapt, or face oblivion.Bas, a member of a lost race of humans, arrives on the magical world of Era. He must adjust to a new way of life using only his wits and an old physics book.Era is in flux. Harmony is shattered and a tyrannical goddess begins to muster her full might in a crusade against anyone who will not bow.They cannot weather the coming storm alone. A deal must be struck.Luneil was born a monster. Can Bas become one?No matter what, Era will never be the same.

This is the story of how a deathtrap becomes a haven, and how a good man becomes a killer.

This story is eventually intended for publishing via Amazon, however, you have my word it will be left up forat least five weeksfrom the time it is completed (at which point I might be posting the second installment on here), so you don't need to worry about it disappearing overnight. Also, bear in mind that this is all a first draft before any significant edits. There will likely be spelling, grammar and continuity errors, I will address them as soon as I spot them or you point them out. I read every comment (and reply, time permitting). Please feel free to criticize (I suspect I have a somewhat longwinded writing style, shouting really does help :) ), and above allenjoy.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Alexis Keane

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 984
Views: 200,587

Chapters(17 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

ViergachtRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story takes the basic tropes of the inexplicably popular Divine Dungeon series and does them RIGHT - characters that are consistent, with depth and believable growth, a developed world that isn't just focused on dungeon-delving, and far better written in terms of grammar and other basic mechanics. The banter between characters is actually funny and flows the way people actually talk instead of being clunky and painfully tin-eared, and the dungeon's grwoth from near-mindlessness to a slowly advancing and eerily inhuman intelligence is both fascinating and chilling. The dungeon character's discoveries and innovations actually are clever, and it will be interesting to see how he clashes with two developing enemies he sin't even aware of yet. Although it does get info-dumpy at time, that's kind of the nature of the genre, and it's done in third person omniscient rather than using a character as Captain Exposition with a couple of "uh-huhs" to break up the dialog.
All in all an excellent story that I would happily pay money to get on Kindle.
Alexander Olive OilRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Characters are well presented already despite the number of chapters.
ToBeAndNotToBeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Ayyy, this one's pretty good! Almost forgot to write a review :)
Time of writing: Chapter 9 - "Here kitty kitty" was published 7 days ago.
In terms of style, what you're getting is a rather free-spirited novel. It doesn't quite fit in the cookie cutter vibes that similar eastern novels give, even if the genre is right up that alley with reincarnation and all. Due to the simple nature of following multiple characters, it has the sort of feeling 修真世界 World of Cultivation gives, but only because of the shifting.
There were some grammar errors, but the author fixes those as soon as they're pointed out.
Chapter titles are amazing (clickbait). Contrary to my belief, clickbait titles are actually a thing. For instance one of the disappointments stories I wrote had a chapter with a title people found interesting. How do I know this? It had twice the views compared to the preceding chapters ._.
Now, regarding mechanics... (bum bum bum???) [fun facts]
Spoiler: Spoiler
Language isn't an issue (eg. pop into new world, hey mabois wassup. I don't blame the author, dealing with that shit is ridiculous)
Magic follows states of matter, which is ridiculous but intriguing, the implication being mana is incredibly similar to matter.
There are no levels, this uses a wuxia-like system for strength, minus the tribulations.
Memories are linked to the soul, independent of the mind. At the same time, they aren't. :thonking:
Gods are actually really weak. Why?
There are gods, but they can die. They don't leave souls behind, or if they do, they haven't been mentioned.
Other worlds exist in the same universe, but they don't have mana or the system. (eg. EARTH) Why not erase/purge/annihilate these with your forces and damn them all to eternal hell? Five centuries ago, there was no modern technology on Earth and it should be incredibly easy, given the magical power.
Gods receive lifeforce donations, which they can use. It is unclear whether or not they require lifeforce donations (do they
ApricityRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: The style is well controlled and sofisticated. The author makes small variation of style to fit the situations creating a seemlessly blended stream of narrative. Author uses a good range of word choice.
Grammar: authors spelling and grammar is spot on. A handful of errors in chapters over 5000 words long. And only at the start. When spoted author fixes them immediately and credits the person who found them in the authors notes. Very polished sentenses author obviously puts in a lot of work.
Story: unoriginal concept, but author makes it his own in a way that is completely unique. Narrative is already well develloped and word building is exellent and imaginative. Story is filled with unseen threat and hiden tension. Briliant and engaging. Intresting magic system I've never seen before.
Character: charaters are believable and not OP, despite this, obvious that they are inteligent and with potential to grow in power. Each character is well thought out and planned. Seems to be no chance of this becomming harem novel with undrdeveloped characters. I can tell whose speaking just by listening to dialogue.
Creationism0Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overview
So for those not interested in long review, the TL;DR is that this story is far and above better than the usual fare, excellent spelling and grammar with very few mistakes, all of them extremely minor and easy to miss, and most importantly, the characters feel really good and solid. Each is not just unique, but realistically react to their situations, making them feel far more "human" than many characters in even professionally written novels. Its a must read!
Now for the nitty gritty review for everyone else
Style
The style of the sotry itself is not yet overly unique, but the author expertly weaves the story through what I would otherwise call cliches, making each situation feel fresh and unique. When the author breaks from her style, its only to enhance the situations that the characters are in, making the reading both more enoyable and exciting!
Story
The story itself is phenomenally written, and it shows that the author has experience. Although the concept is a path well tread on RRL, she manages to breath life into it, making each experience unique and fresh. From the way the characters are written to the way she portrays the goings on of the world around the characters, everything feels very real and believeable.
The grammar of Dungeon Pact is extremely strong. I can find very few mistakes in each chapter, and most are so minor that it's hard for me to recall as I write this what they were. For those of us who know the importance of grammar, you won't have to worry about that with this novel.
Characters
The characters in Dungeon Pact are extremely well written. They are both unique from each other and also extremely believeable. Thhe experiences that each character has gone through before the story shows through with each interaction that the characters have, as well as their general view of the world. The only minor complaint I have and the reason that I docked half a star is that it feels as if the main character has had much less development that
DragondeathlordRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I have no words for how cool this was but please Fates let me try! This is Wonderful! Truly Epic! It is Pure Adventure! It overwhelmed the soul! Much like Elric of Melniboné ! The hero is a villain driven to Villainy! I am simply overwhelmed! I Read one page and I have left Gasping!
ASmallFishRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The characters are well laid out, the chapters are a good length and the premise, while not unique, has been well executed so far.
I look forward to more of the story and hope the author continues writing.
Update: Interesting developments all around, the "villains" seem to be complex, rather than the 2D cardboard cutouts that you see so much these days.
The dungeon itself is intriguing and the place it is set in is fantastic
YoloRRLreaderRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Usual idea for a dungeon story, but a new and exciting way to go about it. The author makes a style all their own and has little to no errors in grammar, definitely of enough to disrupt the flow. Characters so far are well thought out and have been fleshed out well. Slow output of chapters, but lots in each chapter, I even find myself enjoying the evolution of a blade of grass.
supercanRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
A good dungeon/transmigration story.
Believable characters and motives.
Interesting magic system that reminds me of Rank 3 in WMW.
Excelent word building, the map is great.
Great setting, full of background tension and many undercurrents.
Overall, Zeph was cuter when she was dumb.
Also it's a shame the author does not seem to have the commitment anymore to finish the story. At the time I am writing this the hiatus has been 5 months long since chapter 17. Who knows what happened.
EverShadowRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I think the idea put out here is absolutely fascinating and the setup for the story is masterfully done. I was entralled from the very first chapter. Unfortunately, while the rest of the story is still enjoyable, it loses momentum and slows down quite a bit. The character development and plot movement is slow, and while that can work in some cases, the author doesn't release chapters fast enough to keep the reader's interest. It's still a fun story, but it could be better. I still look forward to new chapters. Thanks for writing!
Short Version: One of the most interesting starts, but doesn't keep the momentum going later in the story.