The Dungeon of Evolution

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Description

The greatest mage and researcher in the universe, Ian Irwin, known to only his closest friends died at far too young an age. For their own goals and to give the mage another chance at life, the Gods and Goddesses reincarnated him into a dungeon. Most would shudder at the thought, in fact Ian did, but not for the same reasons. The plants, animals, fungi, and monsters that inhabited dungeons fascinated Ian in a way nothing besides his wife had. Ian had studied everything he could about dungeons and now he could be one.

Traumatising Content: Besides the purpose of dungeons, the presenting of evil morals as a positive is not present in this novel. Evil morals themselves, however, are present. Combined with the gore tag, there will be imagery present that could be considered traumatising. The absence of the sexual content tag means there will be no scenes of that nature. I, the author, apologize to any previous readers that, due to my previous clarification, read the story with the belief that scenes of disturbing imagery would not be present.

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2018
Author: MaxOsnes

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

Luke ScheffeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
An excellent book overall, with lots of interesting twists.
BorokRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
First time leaving a review. I'm not a native English speaker so can't really comment on grammar and stuff but so far I have found it extremely easy to read with no issues. The Story seems well thought out and I love the long chapter length, the first 2 chapters is at least as long as 3 or 4 chapters on most other stories here. Would recommend to give it a try on what is out so far.
MoretaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story is written in very specific way that might not be for everyone, as lot of people prefer action writing, but for those who like to think about how things work and just enjoy building mental images of descripted things it's perfect.
Ian is smart, intelligent and curious, and it can be felt during reading about his creative process. This is rare. It deserves appreciation when author managed to get right what far too many got wrong.
Adventurers point of view grands us change of peace preventing the work from feeling stagnant and always keeps just the right amount of surprised left out during the construction chapters.
Eclipse413Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The main character, Ian, is highly intelligent; with everything that entails, not just the fun bits people like OP stories for. He grows bored easily, his thought processes constantly jumping between similar topics, and feels like he's constantly working one step ahead.
That said, the writing is very high-quality, as is the characterization. I enjoyed everything I read, even if I did have to skim over some paragraphs that I couldn't wrap my head around.
KnogleknuserRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
*Made at chapter 29*
I am not going to use the setup Royalroad wants in this review, instead I will focus on the parts I find important.
Common Webnovel Pitfalls
This novel is a reincarnation story, and follows the cliché meeting with some god that then sends our MC on his way to the next life because he was “chosen” for reasons.
However, unlike other novels where our MC is some completely random nobody with nothing remarkable about him, our MC actually have loads of qualities that makes it so that it makes sense for him to be chosen and reincarnated the way he was.
Our MC is also OP. Which is again supported with good reason, and even more important, purpose. Not only does he have power, but he also have a purpose and ambition, neither which are bland or general but instead they are very specific.
MC is a good guy. By good guy I mean the MC in most novels is some kind of angel among humans for seemingly no reason, and while our MC is definitely good, he isn’t even close to an angel or a spineless goody two shoe.
LightRPG. Most stories that use this system of power/magic, usually does so because the author does not wish to step out of his comfort zone and invent/think about an internally cohesive magic system. In most cases, the users of magic and power in such stories are solely reliant on skills from the system and have no idea how anything actually work.
Not this story, honestly, it didn’t even need to be an LightRPG. It has a detailed and rich magic system that can work completely without the system. And most things only the system knows how to do, were probably something created by the greater god, and as such, the gods of the story’s universe also don’t understand it. The entire reason for the system will probably revealed at some point, and I bet it has something to do with the eccentric greater god.
In conclusion, while this novel does follow some clichés, but it does so with thought, world building and solid reasoning instead of blindly following a trend wi
WaytocoolRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
You just lost me at some point.
HamsterDesTodesRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This is a dungeon core story with a good premise, meticulous world building and interesting characters but weakened by severe flaws.
Said flaws being that it's incredibly long-winded and lacks pacing. A bunch of unimportant stat pages and far too detailed room descriptions made me skim-read a lot of the building part of the story. Unfortunately, it doesn't get better in the exploration-part. Here, the author made the mistake (not uncommon in the dungeon core subgenre for some unexplainable reason) of using a high-level exploration group to present the human PoV. This makes this second PoV incredible boring to read. The principle of show-not-tell is made impossible if even the showing devolves into telling because the explorers out level the dungeon floor they're on by so much, there's not much going on but a list of annihilated creatures that can't put up a fight, much less a decent challenge.
This lack of tensions overshadows the fact that this skip in PoV from core to explorer begins a year in the future, without any kind of explanation or even mention of the time-skip. If you don't follow the comments, you're left wondering where the year of preparation went, and once the PoV skips back to the dungeon core - and back in the present - you'll be very confused about where the adventurers vanished to.
Yes, I know, this is RRL and the story I read is only a draft. That's why I still gave 3 stars, despite all my complaints. If this story is ever going to be published, I fear an extensive rewrite is in order. Still, the premise is good and the attention to detail is obviously there - if sometimes misdirected - so I see no reason why the author shouldn't succeed. Write on!
PrimalShadowRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
So far (as of Chapter 14), the story has been exceedingly slow. It gives us chapter after chapter of exposition, with no conflict and negligible character interaction. Basically, it feels like 200 pages of prologue, with the actual story not yet in sight. I can only hope that things will improve somewhat when adventurers finally get introduced.
EDIT: The first adventurers are introduced. So at least something has started happening now! The adventurers enter the dungeon, they start interacting with it and reacting to it... and then our author begins to describe their trip through every room on the G- floor, one at a time. Does every little thing, including the ones that aren't remotely important, really need to be described in detail?
mioRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
really slow story. it's a god story, and well-written, but the explanations are often so expansive that following the story becomes difficult.
that and every floor is made without logic, seemingly random, somthing i only know because of your drawings, since you explanation of your floors is so lengthy that it is impossible to follow.
i only understood why after seeing your drawing. your explanations for the rooms make no sense. maybe introduce some logic in your rooms, then instead of having to use 2000 words for an impossible to understand explanation of your map, you could say something like; "a spiral with rooms south, west, north, east, and a bossroom in the middle"
look 14 words, and i can imagine it instantly!
other than that, your idea is great, grammar is good, and evolution of species is fun. but please work on your explanations, because understanding them gives me a headache, and i have to skip half your chapters since they make no sense to me...
i'm pretty sure i'm not the only one.
danielsmith217Royal Road
★★ 2.0
Ithas an interesting premise, but the longer the story goes on the less I care. Between nothing ever really happening and the book not really going with the premise, it just becomes boring to read.