The Dungeon Hive

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Description

One thing I noticed about most dungeon stories is that most races mistakenly believe that dungeons have a hive-mind and I go, “That make sense.” Considering the various powers and how big dungeons can get, wouldn’t it make more sense for them to have a hive-mind? So this is it; my take of the world’s first dungeon and the hive that controls it. Watch as it stumbles, fall, survive, strive and…procreate? Watch as it changed the world of Ioplon…for better and for worse.

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For edited version of the story, the full trilogy (Book_1: Fantasy Begins,Book_2: Dungeon Flames,Book_3: Spread of the Dungeons) arenow available on Amazon. Please take a look, and leave a rating. Thanks

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2016
Author: Ghostman

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

13lack12oseRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A very unique take on the dungeon core premise. I'm looking forward to the next book.
As mentioned by other reviewers, this book does need more editing, as it is obvious the author is not a native English speaker. That said, it is no worse than most books by non-native authors, with most errors related to tense and pronouns. Overall the story is well thought out, with engaging characters, smooth story flow and interesting action.
GalamanqRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Hura, another awesome story!
PeppacowRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is realy good
eac1Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I accidentally found this when I was looking at a author I liked website and I was pleasantly suprised when I found this. The hive mind is funny and even though it sometimes says at the start which confused me but if you get over that its amazing. In some ways the hive mind progressing is like a child growing up learning new things and making things with their newfound abilities. You should absouletley read this.
skyfireRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
one of the best paced dungeon novels I have read Things are strong but not overpowered and are not growing in power at a reasonable rate
Cool3303Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Unlike most Novels about Dungeons this Story is not about a Individual but instead about a newly created hivemind of spirits wich love to argue and haphazardly create creatures.
Aside from the rather unique spin on the concept the story convinves with good pacing, entertaining Dialogue between the spirits and a fair bit of humor.
The Writing is also thoroughly enjoayble. While starting off (intentionally) primitive the Hive soon begins to use more complex sentences and gains some understanding of more complex concepts.
The only critique I have would be the lack of notable characters.The sidecharacters have their fair share of personality but there is little opportunity to explore it.
The hive also has a ton of quirky spirits but we never get to know them beyond that.
However too much of that might just overburden the story and I enjoy it as a lighthearted story.
ApricityRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I love this book so far, it has a unique premise for a dungeon fic that makes it impossible to put down.
Reasonable rate of growth and a decent style which is compromised in places by bad grammar and spelling
EathRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Loving this story so far, I really like the world you seem to be setting up, and that your dungeon seems to be in the early fantasy era.
supercanRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
It's different from what you would expect, definitely. That difference is overall positive. What I can say about this first book though is that it's not good enough for me to buy the second and third one on Amazon.
Other than the one dimensional evil boss wizard, the dungeon creation and the experiments done by the spirits bring a sense of wonder to the reader.
The dungeon building is there, comedy is there too.
Overall I give this a flying pig out of ten.
EvrinRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Alright, so this is my second time trying this story out and admittedly I got farther this time, but I still ended up stopping before reaching the end.
(SPOILERS AHEAD, YE BE WARNED)
The premise of the story is interesting. It starts off on showing how the first dungeon was born, as well as the learning curve it goes through as it improves step by step.
Honestly, I like this part of the story much more than the instant, "Buy this advancement through the dungeon point system" game system that many other dungeon stories use. There are still game elements involved, as shown by the adventurer status screen depicting the individual strength, mana etc. in numeric terms, however it doesn't seem as all encompassing as in many other stories (at least to the point I reached before stopping).
The interesting premise is sadly overshadowed by the confusing multiple-personality hive dialogue and grammar/spelling errors.
I realize the different voices given by the author are an attempt to depict the disharmony and inner conflict with this hive mentality. I do wish however that this problem were resolved earlier, as I think it was supposed to be funnier than I actually found it. They also seem drawn-out, a single conversation encompassing half of an entire chapter simply because there are so many voices.
(SPOILERS ENDED, BUT SO IS MOST OF THE REVIEW)
The largest bit that finally made me stop reading however was the grammar and spelling.
I'm not a grammar Nazi, honestly I'm not. I'm sure I've made multiple mistakes in this review alone.
The story however, is slightly painful to read.
Don't get me wrong, it's not Pasted-Straight-From-Google-Translate bad, but there are multiple issues.
For example, there are many cases where the wrong word is used in a sentence. The word is usually spelled similarly to the intended word, but the mistakes tended to jolt me as a reader as I had to figure out what was supposed to be written instead of what was written.
Tenses also seem to jump around a