The Divine Traits

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During the dark of night in a small town, a golden glow can be seen a moment later a baby wrapped in a golden blanket made out of an unknown fabric softer than silk. Unknown to the world this was the birth of a new godling a holder of the divine traits. Given god-like powers.

This is a story about a fantasy world where at the age of 16 people will go through a change and unlock dormant "traits" these traits cause powers known as classes the severity of the traits control how rare or powerful these classes are. the main character is a godling an offspring of a god their traits are classified as Divine Traits and are the most powerful traits and contain the best classes and powers. The main character Jericho Stormblood is the first godling in this world and will be a tester for the gods to see if this world is worthy of their children's presence.

This is my first story and is inspired by the story Dantes Immortality which is on this website as well please go check it out

Discord:  jV8vWAx

P.s I do not own the top picture if you are the one who owns it pm me and I will change it I will change it anyways when I can create a better cover picture

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2018
Author
Code Jericho

Tags

LITRPGFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICMALE LEADREADER INTERACTIVE

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3.6/ 5.0
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40
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13,458

Chapters(13 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • llunRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    You NEED to work on how you format your story. That is, how you structure your sentences/paragraphs and your dialogue. It's a giant block of text mashed together.
    If you're confused on what I mean by formatting, then look up other top-rated fictions on this site and see how their authors' structure/format their chapters. From words to sentences and sentences to paragraphs, you'll see that they don't use giant blocks of texts and if they do, it's because those series of sentences are related to each other through an idea.
    Now, onto the grammar. Your grammar and punctuation -- or lack thereof -- need help.
    Also, here's a tip: You're = You are.
    Grab a program like Grammarly. It will help a lot. You also need help using dialogue tags as well.
    As for your story, I have no criticisms for it. There are only two chapters out now.
    You can use google to help you with these things or try and study the top fictions on this site.
    Best of luck to you.