The Demoniac Hero
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
After the Demon Lord's army attacked to world, five years ago, almost all the kingdoms had fall in his hands. In order to fight against the demons, the Church train for three years to 777 soldiers, mercenaries and people from all the world, including Sebastian Berthrod, who had lost his family by the demons' hands and now is searching for revenge. This group was named """"Heroes' Army""""Join in this adventure of action, heroes, demons, tragedy, revenge and romance.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- RAGDE1999
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.1/ 5.0
- Followers
- 4
- Views
- 5,496
Chapters(5 total)
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Community Reviews(3)
- sublime77Royal Road★★★★★ 5.0This story is really interesting, contains a lot of fantasy and magic , from the beginning to the final WAS EXCITED TO KNOW what would happen HERO WITH THIS NOVEL. I CONSIDER THIS STORY IS VERY ORIGINAL AND FULL FRAME ... WAITING FOR NEXT CHAPTER !!!
- PeregrinaRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5I'm very, very intrigate!
Why did the Demon Lord direct that flash of light toward Sebastian?
Could it be that.................
Oh God!
I cannot wait to read the next chapter! ;) - Benjinator12Royal Road★★ 1.5The Demoniac Hero is a work crippled by its own problems. As it currently stands, it's one big boss fight, which a story certainly could be based around and be successful. However, there is enough wrong here that it's simply unacceptable.
The writing style is messy, with the author constantly backtracking, and the dreaded "Oh, I forgot to mention x". Perhaps this is meant to represent the main character's voice, but it is still extremely clumsy.
The story, as it stands, seems to be mostly an excuse for our main characters to battle the Demon Lord. It's full of terrible cliches (MC's family killed in demon raid, thus causing him to dedicate his life to fighting demons) and some bad storytelling (Is the battle where Sebastian slashes apart a wall the first battle of the 777? Or is it later? The layout makes it very difficult to tell), but it achieves its purpose. That does not mean that it is successful. For example, most of the first chapter is spent explaining the history of the world... but even in the middle of the fight, we're still being told how magic spells work. Things like that could have been elaborated on earlier, allowing the fight to flow better. The battle itself is very animesque, and not in a good way. The first half of the battle is one "HOW COULD HE SURVIVE THAT?" after another. The second half is our main characters making a pyrrhic comeback. The jumbled style drains any momentum the fight would have possessed.
The story is loaded with typos and reversed syntax, some of which would seem to indicate that English is not the author's first language. That provides some excuse for the nasty grammar on display here, but not enough. Incorrect word choices, inconsistencies in spelling, and formatting errors abound. This is simply painful to read.
The characters might be the strongest part of the story, but that's not a full-fledged endorsement. Each one has clearly-defined weapons and abilities, and occasionally we get a glimpse of their personalities. Moh