The Chronicles of the Beast Master

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2016

Author

100%Manly

• DROPPED, SORRY
  Feb 29, 2016
• Chapter 13
  Feb 9, 2016
• Chapter 12
  Feb 8, 2016
• Chapter 11.5
  Feb 8, 2016
• Chapter 11
  Jan 26, 2016
• Chapter 10
  Jan 24, 2016
• Chapter 9
  Jan 23, 2016
• Chapter 8
  Jan 23, 2016
• Chapter 7
  Jan 21, 2016
• Chapter 6
  Jan 21, 2016
• Chapter 5
  Jan 20, 2016
• Chapter 4
  Jan 19, 2016
• Chapter 3
  Jan 17, 2016
• Chapter 2
  Jan 16, 2016
• Chapter 1
  Jan 15, 2016
• Chapter 0
  Jan 14, 2016

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• F.DjRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Only the first chap that fun to read, the next chap was like 'wth?!'. The MC was built upon stereotype "pretty girls get all the shit she want and need", there is constant convenient sweet miracles  showering her. I guess this is why the author tag it with 'fantasy' and 'comedy' tags. Its like some kinda 'girls adventure fantasy in full plate armor', it simply not my cup of coffee so I drop it. But you should give it a try, maybe you'll find the story is fun to read. Meanwhile, I'll take my leave.
• TasonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  First off, your grammar was a very nice surprise. Well written and paced, the chapters flow nicely with a very nice length to them.
  The story is interesting, very much so. With the stories title added in along side the story line you've written I'm looking foreword to what will come next.
  Can't honestly give anything more then 4 stars right now, barring grammar which you did as said already very nicely in. I'll also come back later down the road and edit my review to further complement how well/bad the story stands at the time.
  Thank you for the story.
• KaellomRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  This story, although not really original, is well thought out.
  Style: To me it seems you are not used to writing stories, or at least a story of this genre, because of that your style seems a bit bland with nothing that distinguishes you as an individual writer. The only advice I can give for you to improve is to practice, practice and practice even more! A successful writer is not born, they are made, through hours and hours of writing. Keep it up and you'll surely succeed.
  Story: As I said for your story, although it's not original, it seems reasonably well thought out. The only thing I would say is that some parts are quite rushed, and details aren't included in some areas where it would be important to add. So as not to change your story, I won't specifically tell you what parts to change (otherwise, it's not your story anymore).
  Instead, the only advice I can give is that you should read through your story word by word and objectively think on what parts of your story make sense or not, what are the plot-holes? Will the reader understand what you are trying to show them? If you struggle doing it that way, get a friend or family member to read it out for you and see if they struggle to understand parts of your story, which you can change to suit the circumstance.
  Grammar: I'll keep this short and sweet, get someone to proofread for you. A writer will never notice all the mistakes they make in their own work, so its better to have a second pair of eyes to spot them for you. But always re-read through your work after proofreading, in case you change a sentence and then the paragraph doesn't make sense anymore.
  Characters: My main issue with the characters in the story is that some of them seem quite stereotypical and monotonous, its hard to explain. The only advice I could give would be to give as many different descriptions of the things the Main Characters can sense as possible in certain situations, (without going to overboard), for example: what can they smell